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Books / Does anyone remember this series?
« on: August 12, 2011, 12:15:13 AM »
So, I'm trying to remember the name of this series I read as a child. I believe it was a trilogy, but I don't remember the fine points so I'll just give out random details and hope someone recognizes them.

The main character wins a crown at the very beginning of the book by beating someone at riddles. He can then use this crown to win the hand of a princess (her father promised her to whoever returned it to him). He then decides to travel north to see some master of ... something. But the master doesn't help him, because it's actually an impersonator. The real master is a harpist or something at the impersonator's court.

The second book involves these creatures coming from the sea that can take different shapes. The princess gets captured by them and as a result learns to change shape too.

The main man completes a variety of trials that get him a star-sword and other things, which basicly prove he's the heir to the master from the north. He also learns to take different shapes, or something like that.

The end of the series is when he fights the impersonator on top of a tower, and defeats him by taking the shape of wind. He lets the imposter live.

Anyways, I really don't remember many of the details, but I do remember loving the series. Is this ringing any bells with anyone?

Reading Excuses / August 8 – Hubay, Lord Domestic Ch15
« on: August 09, 2011, 04:07:28 AM »
Woo! we have a loooot of submissions this week.

Anyways, here's the second half of last time's chapter. a couple notes: it probably feels like I've introduced several characters late in the game. As i've mentioned before, Jhuz is only one of 3 POV's, but i want to write them seperately so i can focus more on the character arcs. Lisu is one of those POV's. Also, i can't have jhuz stay in camp for too long because in another chapter/chapter and a half i need him back with the legion to keep the story moving. So while i want the part where he's prisoner to feel important and have an impact, i don't want it to last very long. Hopefully I can balance those two out. Let me know what you think!

Hubay – Lord Domestic Ch. 15 (L, S, V)
2,500 words

Summary  Jhuz has been captured by Hex, an octupos-metsi assassin.

Synopsis – Jhuz wakes up outside the Nothroi encampment.

Reading Excuses / July 25 – Hubay, Lord Domestic Ch14
« on: July 26, 2011, 07:17:36 AM »
I ended cutting the last half of this chapter, and completely failed to rewrite the next bit. bleh. I'm at an odd point here. Jhuz got knocked out at the end of the last chapter, and generally I'm not a fan of "character wakes up in an unfamliar place" as a plot device. I'm also on the fence on Hex as a character. He's an assassin, and he doesn't really interact with people much on account of invisibility. So he's a bit off and it shows in his dialogue, which I'm ok with. I'm just worried that in general, when people try to write offbeat characters it ends up sounding like poor humor or fanfiction or something, and I'd rather Hex came off as a little more cracked and unstable than quirky and silly. Let me know what you think.

Hubay, Lord Domestic Ch14 (L,V) 1500 words

Summary: Jhuz's position as Prefect seemed stable and the Legion is finally on the mend, but an intruder knocks him out in his tent.

CH14: We meet Hex, Jhuz's assassin captor and octopus-metsi Servant of the Eight.

Brandon Sanderson / The Elendel Daily
« on: July 16, 2011, 04:45:30 PM »
Is there a way to get this awesome-looking paper, if I don't go to comic-con or polaris? I would probably be willing to pay a few dollars to get a pdf.

Reading Excuses / July 11 – Hubay, Lord Domestic Ch13
« on: July 12, 2011, 12:52:07 AM »
Here it is: the end of act 2. I think it ends alright. One of the conflicts changes shape and a new one starts up.
As a side note, in the rape scene a few chapters back, it ends with Jhuz putting Ponticae (the senator) in charge of watching over the prisoner, for diplomatic reasons. Anyways, enjoy!

7-11-11 Hubay, Lord domestic ch13 (L,V,S,D)

Summary: under Jhuz's new leadership, the Legion has finally won a battle. Last chapter they were celebrating the victory and Zaisha showed off a new metsi-powered weapon she created.

Ch13: Jhuz finally confronts the Jackal, but it doesn't end the way he expects.

Let me know what you think of the very end. I want it to have some punch – it's the last chapter of the act, after all. So let me know how successful it is.

Reading Excuses / June 24 – Hubay, Lord Domestic Ch12
« on: June 21, 2011, 06:06:10 AM »
Sorry about the wait – I got a dog today! anyways, this is the last chapter of Part 2 of Jhuz's storyline, or at least the first half of that chapter. I should have the second half next week. anyways, this is mostly an aftermath sort of chapter, but I also add in a bit of what's to come with Zaisha. Let me know what you think about the Dombow.

Hubay, Lord Domestic Ch12 (L,V,S,D)

Summary: the Legion has finally achieved victory against the Nothroi host, though not the army entire. After looting the enemy camp, Jhuz and the army celebrate.

Reading Excuses / May 30 – Hubay – Lord Domestic Ch 11
« on: May 31, 2011, 03:15:39 AM »
Sorry about the wait, everyone. I've been pretty busy today.
So this is the big battle scene! I'm excited to hear back from everyone, a lot happens in this chapter and I hope I pull it off well. Thinking about what Akoebel said, I decided to put Jhuz's crisis about leadership in this chapter, to make it seem organic. The discussion at the end of the last chapter will have to be re-written.

I'd also appreciate any feedback on Jhuz's leadership and how reasonable it feel. Fireflyz, I know you've been busy lately, but since you have a lot of experience with the military (hope you're enjoying memorial day, by the way) I'd like to know what you think. Anyways:

Hubay – Lord Domestic Ch11 (L,V,S)

Last chapter: Jhuz meets Rince, a fox-metsi and archer. A division of the Nothroi army approaches.

Summary: The Legion and Nothroi fight, and Jhuz is forced into a leadership role


Writing Group / How many medics does an army need?
« on: May 25, 2011, 09:58:14 PM »
Note: This will probably make the most sense to people in Reading Excuses, as it's part of my Lord Domestic story. But any input is going to be valuable, so thanks!

As part of my current story, I have an army that was at full strength, but then gets destroyed in a rout and following disease/starvation, and is now at about full strength. I'm still  trying to figure out how my army is organized, and how many supporting people like quartermasters, surgeons, and supply-chain people it needs to function properly. I don't want it to operate properly after the rout; I'm trying to figure out how this machine works so I can break it.

Anyways. here's a basic command structure. I've omitted irrelevant positions.

1 Prefect (general, more or less) in charge of Legion
10 Penti, each in charge of 1 cohort (5 Centuries).
50 Centuries, each having 100 men.

The tenth cohort is the Immunes, people with supporting or engineering roles. As of right now it's divided so that 3 centuries are composed of some sort of engineer, which operate on their own terms. The other two work more closely with the soldiers.

Then there's one century of medics, and one century of quartermaster ( I use the term loosely here. They handle all sorts of supply stuff). They function the same way: 50 of the men are on assignment with a specific century of soldiers – that's one per century – and the other half runs a sort of central hub, kept out of batttle, where they can pool their resources together and manage the army.

I think this makes a lot sense for the supply century. you get one quartermaster/cook guy per every 100 men, and then a huge stockpile of resources overseen by 50 men, who also handle logistics when the army is on the move.

I'm not sure if it works for the medics. Having a 50-man hospital would probably work, and I think an army would want a combat surgeon during the fight, but I don't know if 1 doctor per 100 men makes much sense once battle begins and people start losing arms and legs.

That's a lot of info to mull over, so if you've reached this far, thanks! I'm just wondering if I should organize my medics differently, just increase their numbers, or if this system looks like it works after all. Thanks!

Brandon Sanderson / Creating the Shattered Plains (WoK spoilers)
« on: May 25, 2011, 08:44:29 PM »
One of the two big questions Jasnah is working on is Urithiru and the shattered plains.

It's suggested that Urithiru might have been at the shattered plains, and then it was destroyed, allowing the parshendi to take weapons from the ruins. Jasnah says this is incorrect. She doesn't give any explanations, however. It's possible that she knows where Urithiru is, but it's also possible she's wrong or even lying – it wouldn't be the first time brandon tricked us.

But what if Urithiru was stationed over the shattered plains. We know one of the stormlight powers is gravity based. We also know that specific stormlight powers, like soulcasting, can be inserted into fabrials. So what if all of Urithiru was a massive fabrial – or at least supported by one – that could float midair? When the knights radiant fell, Urithiru would have landed wherever it was stationed over. I'm assuming here that Urithiru wouldn't have been stationary. This allows the city to belong to no specific country, like the radiant in Dalinar's vision said, and also to help wherever help is needed. It would also explain why the radiants fall from the sky in the visions. (It's also possible they can fly, I admit, but we don't see that, just falling).


Reading Excuses / May 23 – Hubay – Lord Domestic Ch 10
« on: May 23, 2011, 10:02:13 PM »
Alright, chapter 10! I introduce a new character here, so let me know what you think. He has a fox familiar, which intoduces a new kind of magic as well, so I'm curious what you think of both the ability and how I explain it.

Other than that, this chapter is all a huge build up for the next chapter, which is the first big battle of the book. It's a lot of discussion of tactics and such, so I'd appreciate any feedback on how good my planning sounds, and if it's all necessary/not enough.

Hubay – Lord Domestic Ch10 (L,V,S)

Jhuz had to kill one of his men yesterday because he was going to rape a prisoner. He's a little worried about the implications of that. They're still concened about food, low morale, and a possible mutiny.

This chapter:
Jhuz meets a new character, and a Nothroi host approaches. Tension in the war room, and Ezlio forces Jhuz to make a decision.

Reading Excuses / April 25 – Hubay – Lord Domestic Ch 9
« on: April 26, 2011, 09:27:51 AM »
Sorry this is so late. Thought I had the opening scene worked out but then it collapsed on me. Anyways, here's the rest of the chapter, with a brief synopsis at the beginning of what the opening scene should have been. Thanks for the feedback in advance. I'm particularly interested to see how you all think Jhuz is coming along as a character.

4-25-11 Hubay, Lord Domestic Ch.9 (L,V,S)

Summary: The Imperial Legion is on the run, caught between the supernal Chell and barbarian Nothroi. Jhuz has just heard some disturbing news about the Capitol from Ezlio, and his maidservant revealed that she often spies on couples using flower petals and commetsi. One of her petals wound up in the wrong place, however and she overhears two men planning on assaulting the female Nothroi prisoner Jainifer.

Ch.9 Jhuz schemes with Zaisha, gets dressed down by Manto, and tries his hand and commanding some of the flyers.

Reading Excuses / April 11 – Hubay – Lord Domestic Ch 8
« on: April 12, 2011, 02:45:22 AM »
Well, I made it. Shame avoided. This is a wierd chapter for me, because it's one of the "boring bits" and I wasn't really sure what I wanted to happen, so it ended up being almost entirely dialogue.  Anyways, I tried to make up for that by adding some more jokes than normal. Humor is really hard to pull of, though, so let me know where it falls flat and where I'm trying to hard – especially if the innuendo comes off awkward.

Hope me warning you doesn't ruin perfectly good jokes. Anyways:

Hubay- Lord Domestic Ch.8 – 2500 words (L, V, S)
Hiding out in the wilderness, the Legion is caught between the barbarian Nothroi and the supernal Chell. Arilu was just murdered in a fashion so brutal only a chell could have accomplished it. Had he lived a few minutes longer, he would have signed a paper putting Jhuz third in command (well, second now, cuz Arilu's dead)

A day after Arilu dies, Jhuz tries to figure out the next step with Ezlio and Zaisha, and Jhuz's servant Ela reveals a bad habit of hers.

So, if you check the most recent annotations for Warbreaker, Mr. Sanderson mentions two crazy little tidbits – one, had the second Manywar happened, the Idrians would have eventually won, and the world would have burned, because Yelsteel (sp?) would have discovered the secret to making more nightbloods. Uhoh.

Two, he says lifeless are more aware than people think. He even said he'll try and get a lifeless pov in the next book if it works out.


Reading Excuses / March 21 – Hubay – Lord Domestic Ch 7
« on: March 21, 2011, 06:35:57 PM »
Here's the next one, back on the regular timeline. I feel like I didn't do the murder scene at the end justice, so let me know if you have any ideas to make it stronger. Thanks!

Hubay – Lord Domestic Ch7 (L,V,S)

Jhuz captured a scouting harpy named Jainifer, but on the way back foolishly gave her up to the Jackal Lexio so he didn't have to carry her. Zaisha is becoming increasingly worried about unrest in camp.

Chapter 7: Jhuz interrogates the prisoner, talks chain of command with Arilu, and Arilu has a run-in with the Chell.

Reading Excuses / March 7 – Hubay – Lord Domestic Ch 0
« on: March 07, 2011, 07:32:19 PM »
Hey everyone. I'm trying something a little different this week. I wrote a prologue to the rest of my chapters so far, that mostly serves to explain the magic system. It's the story of Jhuz as he recieves his familiar. As such, it's a lot of exposition, and I may still have explained the magic poorly. Let me know what you think.

I also tried switching the –mejji suffix to –metsi. I think the double j's might have made it annoying to read, and I think the new one feels a little more roman-flavored. That said, it still feels off to me, so I'd appreciate any feedback or ideas.

Hubay - Lord Domestic, Ch 0. (L,V?) It's pretty tame, actually, but most of my stuff isn't.
2700 words

The imperial taxonomist Dezrius helps a six-year-old Jhuz pick out his familiar.

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