Hmmm, well, first I should start off by saying that this will
not be a book. We have plans to turn this into an anime/manga. This is basically just a very in-depth fan-fic, well, I
hope it's in-depth lol. Even though I got positive reviews from the other two people who are part of Ascension, it's refreshing to get other people's opinions. When I say that I mean people that know nothing about it. After all, that's what it
will come down to even in anime/manga form. Everyone seems to hate Raven, which is exactly what we were expecting lol.
All the negative reviews on all the gore/violence
(well it wasn't really positive =P) makes me think it does need to be, hmmmm what's the word, I guess...redone? By that I mean not so much gore. I'm not really sure, have to think about it. Although, I would appreciate some opinions on what could be done about this... It's also a little frustrating not being able to explain why Ascension starts out with Raven >.<;. That would require spoilers on top of story explaining and more spoilers, etc. I
can say that Chapter Five will be renewing to those that dislike and want a break from Raven *cougheveryonecough*.
So now I really dislike Raven, who seems to be obviously the MC at this point, and even when I could see you trying to redeem him with the sister and stuff at the end, all I could think was, ‘forget about it buddy, you killed millions and they are just threatening to kill one person that I don't know enough about to really care about. No sympathy points what-so-ever.’
Honestly I expected very little to
no sympathy points lol.
So even though your plot, pacing and magic system (it seems pretty complicated, but in a good way) and writing style in general seems to be well thought out and moving right along
Well, actually we had agreed that a sort of "schedule" would keep me and everyone on track. However, that schedule
was one chapter every three days. Even though it was a revision on the other chapters we did, it still was extremely exhausting trying to write the way I did with something that I was really trying to make phenomenal. So in the end I may just end up rewriting all these chapters once again, because I really want Ascension to work. Although, I'll be taking my time and going over it many times before submitting it if I do choose this option... I plan to talk to Chaos today about Ascension, and now I think it's really not an option =P.
Also, how can they even fit 80+ soldiers into a bombed out building!!?? And how do they convince 30 more soldiers to fight Raven after watching an even greater number being torn apart?
Well, I might as well just tell you that those soldiers were tricked into it lol. We ALL knew they would never do it willingly hehe
(Or at least I think that's what we decided to do). Next, about your 80+ soldiers comment, I have to ask that you refer to piece I typed just above your quote where I talked about the schedule. It's really difficult (even though it was a major revision) to fit and put in everything I wanted in a time span of three days >.<;.
Note to Chaos- Remind me to dropkick Zen... I do agree that it needs more describing and explaining. This also makes me lean more towards redoing it all over again...
I have to say that I enjoyed hearing opinions from people who don't know anything about Ascension. It's really made me rethink a lot of things, and reinforce some things I've been thinking about. Really gotta hand it to Chaos for talking me into doing this lol, it was definitely worth it. *Super Awesome Hugs Everyone* lol...