This message is more for people who know me than peole I've never met.
Having not done any writing recently except for manga rewriting, I'm currently doing the English Adaptation (a.k.a. rewriting) for volume 3 of .hack//Another Birth, which follows the events of the 3rd .hack video game (but from BlackRose's point of view). I'm doing this very fast since I'm under a deadline of less than 2 weeks from now, but I think it's going more or less okay. Still, I'd like some feedback I might put to use for the parts I haven't gotten to yet. Anyone interested? The book's on track to be about 49,000 words long, and I've gotten through a quarter of that. I...didn't start at the beginning, though, since I hadn't ramped up my writing yet; I started about 10 pages in and will go back to the beginning later.
Uh...it's more or less YA sci-fi/fantasy. With very Japanese attitudes. And the kind of feedback I'd be looking for is things I'm screwing up, writing-wise. The story itself is set in stone.
Peter