Thanks for the comments and observations.
The best help I received on the original version were the questions on just how great Isis' vision actually was and why did she die in a quality auto while the boy (unbuckled) survived.
Those issues have been addressed in the revision.
To me, wanting money was motive enough for any robbery.
Also, no one was supposed to like Isis so her being a thief was justification for her death.
However, in order to override those last two objections, I made changes that, in my opinion, make it a different story. And as a result, Isis is now liked and her death seems the wrong ending.
The changes made have created a different story than I originally wanted to tell. To make any additional changes the story will be even less of of my original story. For this reason, I think I'll refrain from additional changes.
I like abrupt endings. As long as I don't leave any loose ends I'll likely often have abrupt endings -- especially in micro stories. Just part of my style, I guess.
Since this group is more into full length novels, trilogies and epic fiction, I'll refrain from posting any more micro stories. I do plan to submit some short stories (but not micro) in the future.
Again, thanks for the comments. Even if it does not sound like it, I do appreciate the critiques. I am learning from them.
Derby