Author Topic: Jan. 18 -Asmodemon - The Citadel of Thorns, Prologue  (Read 3503 times)

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Re: Jan. 18 -Asmodemon - The Citadel of Thorns, Prologue
« Reply #15 on: September 03, 2010, 03:54:19 AM »
Everything I would have said has already been addressed. 

As a prologue it works because I want to know what happened to Black Rose.  As a prologue it doesn't work, because there's too much of a disconnect between Black Rose and Rosen- there's no clue how much time has passed, exactly, and no indication of why he wants to release her.  I would suggest taking Rosen out of the prologue entirely and just putting him in chapter 1.  That's the beginning of the new timeline, and readers expect a certain amount of disconnect between a prologue and the first chapter.
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