Y.A.S.P... (Also known as Scribbler)

[Spriggan]

You know EUOL, you really need to start charging a surcharge for people to read this stuff like $2 or something.

[Faster Master St. Pastor]

Alright Brandon, I got the email with Scribbler in it. Hopefully I'll have read it and sent you comments by the middle of next week or so, but who knows.

[first]

hey i just read the first chapter in the free chapters for warbreaker and i thot it was the most interesting beginning compared to warbreaker, elantris, and mistborn. is there a way i can read some more of it?

[U-Boat]

I read the 1st chapter of Sribbler which is on bs.com....and its very interesting.
Would like to read more, if possible. 

[Qarlin]

The sample chapters at the end of Warbreaker are for Mistborn, Elantris, and Alcatraz. Not Scribbler.

[U-Boat]

http://www.brandonsanderson.com/drafts/warbreaker/scribblerch1.doc

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[Qarlin]

Well. That is an interesting beginning. Can they do this form of magic in anything besides chalk? Etchings in stone or metal, ink drawings, or such like that? I know not the chaklings (maybe in ink), but some of the basic defenses or something like that?

[ideadude]

He may be crazy, but the books are crazy good.  I want to play the scribbler video game which could be based on this program:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=df8wAla57PI

Here is the game I was thinking of when reading the first chapter of Scibbler:
http://shedletsky.com/euclideancrisis/media.html

The game is still in development. The students at Stanford behind the game were finalists at the Independent Games Festival. (http://shedletsky.com/euclideancrisis/)

[first]

he put another chapter out too at the warbreaker page. Its pretty cool but the way the people talk sounds a bit too much like today sometimes. He should put something like how the warbreaker people always swear saying colors so that it sounds more different. Hope he keeps putting some more chapters up though or the book comes out so i can buy it

[Peter Ahlstrom]

I was never clear on what century Scribbler takes place in.

[Jelly_Belly]

I got the impression that it was sort of an alternate history where the technology went a different direction (i.e. springwork rather than steam and then oil), although I think that could be clarified.

[EUOL]

I'm still trying to hammer out the setting on this one, so comments like First made are very helpful to me.  I'm not sure if I want to leave the 'sexy' comment in there or not.  That's one of the big offenders. 

My original idea for it was, actually, something more along the lines of Lemony Snicket or His Dark Materials.  They aren't alternate histories, but something else--where the book doesn't really define which century it's taking place in, and where some things are modern and some are not.  However, my books tend to be more 'hard' than theirs, so I don't know if I can get away with it or not.

As for those who asked to read the book, I have to be very careful whom I send this to, as it isn't sold yet and so if it gets posted on the internet, it could really foul up my chances of finding a publisher.  That said, I will be looking for some readers when I do the next draft, so if you still want to read it, PM me and when I do the rewrite in a month or so, I'll pick a few and send out copies for review. 

[Fellfrosch]

I want to read "Lemony Snicket and His Dark Materials."

[first]

if its going to be like sort of modern like you said, i would say to put something more than just the way they talk. Just like having somebody use a sink could help--although depending on how modern you want it to be, that particular way of doing it might be less helpful and more just confusing. I dont know if you did in anything like that in the later chapters , but other than their speech everything seemed pretty medieval to me. It might just be because that's when most of the books that i've read and had magic in them were set, though.

[Peter Ahlstrom]

Late 19th century or early 20th century seems most likely, unless that universe's version of the Civil War happens at some other time.