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Re: Comedic "english" haikus
« Reply #30 on: May 13, 2004, 09:23:44 PM »
Technically Saint could stop someone from making an alternate thread, as coulld Fell.  They are the overlords here.  Anyway, I don't see why they can't all be mixed here.  Unless they are really funny, the deep and meaninful ones are better, although I obviously don't have too much practice... (see my previous post) I do enjoy other peoples...
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Re: Comedic "english" haikus
« Reply #31 on: May 13, 2004, 09:27:22 PM »
actually I liked your third one
Tappin my feet the the beat of original sin.
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Re: Comedic "english" haikus
« Reply #32 on: May 13, 2004, 09:42:15 PM »
Well that's cause your more into the humour Haiku than the serious ones.  I'm not, and I'm no good either.  That's what kills me...
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Re: Comedic "english" haikus
« Reply #33 on: May 13, 2004, 09:48:12 PM »
When does a haiku
make a stretch in time-space?
Why, never of course.
“NOTHING IS TRUE. EVERYTHING IS PERMITTED.”
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Re: Comedic "english" haikus
« Reply #34 on: May 14, 2004, 07:19:39 AM »
I know this is spaced widely, I did it delibrately to slow down reading. Don't just skim if you're interested, instead *read*.

Some Semi-traditional ones (Would be traditional, save for being English, and not using some of the conventions I didn't know at the time):



Grasses in the sand
Weak wire fence stretched affront.
A failed attempt.



Bird Flying, Soaring.
Middle distance from the ground.
Flares wings back, and falls.



Vast welling ocean
Cacophony of wonder.
Insignificant.



Wired Red-orange
Mournfully angled disc
True Significance.



In my artistic, Romantic Youth I actually wrote a few Senryuu describing people I know:


Shining Metaphor.
Artist, Poet, Director.
Articulate joy.


Bright caricature.
Aflame with optimism.
Eclectic Passion.



How about a cookie cutter one, that, while not original, I feel has Suchness?



Writing Implement
Thumb presses down on the top
Clicking of a spring


Finally, three Senryuu expressing my feelings towards nerddom and the internet:



A world presented.
I do not belong in it.
They are not like me.


A world discovered.
I do not belong in it.
Though they accept me.


A world created.
I belong here, this new place.
For they are like me.
« Last Edit: May 14, 2004, 07:20:47 AM by JamPaladin »
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Re: Comedic "english" haikus
« Reply #35 on: May 14, 2004, 10:44:41 AM »
Psh, Nerds.
If you're ever in an argument and Entropy winds up looking staid and temperate in comparison, it might be time to cut your losses and start a new thread about something else :)

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Re: Comedic "english" haikus
« Reply #36 on: May 14, 2004, 11:17:10 AM »
Now you sound like Tage
you two should get a room ok
and leave us alone
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Re: Comedic "english" haikus
« Reply #37 on: May 14, 2004, 11:31:56 AM »
or if you want a more "Traditional" version
(ok I'm takeing a liberty here since I don't know how tage is pronounced.  In the above one it's a one sylabale, here it's 2)

Entropy, Tage
existence, thoughts intertwined
let peace be with us
« Last Edit: May 14, 2004, 11:34:59 AM by Spriggan »
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Re: Comedic "english" haikus
« Reply #38 on: May 15, 2004, 05:49:28 PM »
I liked those a lot.  And I liked the one about Entropy and Tage leaving us alone too  ;D.
"Sin lies only in hurting other people unnecessarily. All other 'sins' are invented nonsense."
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