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Reading Excuses / July 4 - SkyhunterCommander - Untitled Sci-Fi Epic Chapter 6
« on: July 05, 2011, 04:50:12 AM »
As I said in the email, sorry for getting this out so late. This chapter introduces a new viewpoint- minor compared to the other two I've done so far-he will only have 2-3 chapters to himself, in addition to a few sections in chapters with multiple viewpoints.
This chapter was a bit hard for me to write-Dalcon's viewpoint did not come to me as easily as Darkclaw's and Nayasar's. Also, the first draft of this chapter was way too infodumpy, which is why I took an extra week to rewrite it. I think I fixed most of it, but if anything comes off as an infodump, don't hesitate to mention it.
And and all feedback/comments are greatly appreciated!
Brief Summary: Second Scion Dalcon the Bright joins a mission to find out why all contact was lost from an information storage station three weeks ago. What he finds troubles him.
Summaries of previous chapters:
Chapter 2: Introduces Grand Admiral Nayasar, the young supreme commander of the Felinaris military, who is also their heir to the throne. She waits with her subordinate and close friend Admiral Felivas for a formal meeting with her father, in which she will propose a plan to exact revenge on those responsible for an attack on the Felinaris homeworld that killed many. When her plan is not accepted, she storms out and Felivas tries to calm her down.
Chapter 3: The Troodons, before building their army, are ordered to raid an information station-essentially a giant library- on the edge of Galactic Alliance space to learn what they can about their eventual enemy. Darkclaw sends his subordinate Praetor Keeneye to lead the mission, and watches through a helmet feed. The station is captured without incident, and Darkclaw completes his mission. He relates this to the High Lord, who instructs him to set a course for a hidden station where they will build an army.
Chapter 4: Nayasar is overworking herself, and Felivas demands that she take a mental health day.
Chapter 5: Darkclaw and the Troodons arrive at Selixan Station, a station left by the Saviors, created to rapidly build an army for the Troodons.
This chapter was a bit hard for me to write-Dalcon's viewpoint did not come to me as easily as Darkclaw's and Nayasar's. Also, the first draft of this chapter was way too infodumpy, which is why I took an extra week to rewrite it. I think I fixed most of it, but if anything comes off as an infodump, don't hesitate to mention it.
And and all feedback/comments are greatly appreciated!
Brief Summary: Second Scion Dalcon the Bright joins a mission to find out why all contact was lost from an information storage station three weeks ago. What he finds troubles him.
Summaries of previous chapters:
Chapter 2: Introduces Grand Admiral Nayasar, the young supreme commander of the Felinaris military, who is also their heir to the throne. She waits with her subordinate and close friend Admiral Felivas for a formal meeting with her father, in which she will propose a plan to exact revenge on those responsible for an attack on the Felinaris homeworld that killed many. When her plan is not accepted, she storms out and Felivas tries to calm her down.
Chapter 3: The Troodons, before building their army, are ordered to raid an information station-essentially a giant library- on the edge of Galactic Alliance space to learn what they can about their eventual enemy. Darkclaw sends his subordinate Praetor Keeneye to lead the mission, and watches through a helmet feed. The station is captured without incident, and Darkclaw completes his mission. He relates this to the High Lord, who instructs him to set a course for a hidden station where they will build an army.
Chapter 4: Nayasar is overworking herself, and Felivas demands that she take a mental health day.
Chapter 5: Darkclaw and the Troodons arrive at Selixan Station, a station left by the Saviors, created to rapidly build an army for the Troodons.