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Reading Excuses / Re: Email List + Submission Dates
« on: October 16, 2010, 10:17:04 PM »
I also like to send in a new chapter on monday.
A lot of people describe Scalzi’s Old Man's War novels as military science fiction, but I would classify its sequel Zoë’s Tale as a space opera. It’s a story about, well, Zoë, a teenage girl whose parents are invited to take leadership roles in building a colony on a new planet. Zoë is an enthusiastic member of the group sent to colonize Roanoke, despite the risks—and the risks are considerable even before the political machinations of greater powers boil to the surface. Continue reading Zoë’s Tale
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One thing that didn't work for me was the first paragraph.
And, much as I hate to say it, I'm still not seeing why Dais is even with them to begin with.
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Avoid passive voice, if you can.
This is the first chapter I've read so obviously I'm a bit in the dark as to what's going on. I think using italics for thoughts would make it easier to discern Rosalin's thoughts.
Even though I'm unfamiliar with the story, I'm interested in the direction its heading and for just picking it up: that's a good thing.
and in about 3 seconds
However, in order to override those last two objections, I made changes that, in my opinion, make it a different story. And as a result, Isis is now liked and her death seems the wrong ending.