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I felt like this chapter wasn't really fitting well with the rest of the story, Meles and the Twins are fighting for their lives and the characters that have the power to help them are kind of sitting around and talking. This early on in the story  I think it would be better to have a little more things being done by Taq. Then have the slow moving parts of the story happen when the characters are not in danger (or when the characters in the slow moving parts don't know that others are in danger). I just didn't feel the urgency Taq must have been feeling when I read this.

Also something I noticed is that alot of your names have the letter K at the begining or at the end. Not sure If your doing this on purpose but I'm getting the feeling that its just 1 person making the names up and that they are not byproducts of the culture like they should be.  Also im not sure if others have noticed but Qwerlik's name sounds a lot like Qwerty and that just keeps jolting me out of the book and back into reality. Its like having a character named Microsoftlik, it reminds me of something that should only belong in our world and It just yanks me out of the story.

Reading Excuses / Re: Email List + Submission Dates
« on: July 08, 2009, 11:21:07 PM »
Chaos, who is M? I keep my own list because my email provider doesn't allow me to CC or BCC that many people.

Create a gmail, their limit is like 300+ I think.

Reading Excuses / Re: Your Background
« on: July 08, 2009, 09:38:49 PM »
Hey guys

My name is Raphael. I just started writing about a month or two ago, so I have a lot to learn.  I'm also pretty young but I don't think that it will effect what and how I write as people would like to think. :P My stories are pretty mild and have to do more with character ambition instead of  'save the world' stuff. I kind of have a little motto when I describe what I write, I write about the state of the world not it's fate.

Fav writers are - Jordan, Sanderson, Glen Cook, Scott lynch, Rothfuss, Erikson, Jim Butcher, and lots more :) ( I have only started reading fantasy a couple years ago, not counting Jordan since I started on him a little longer back, and I have easily gone through 80+ books since then.)

I joined the writing group and i'm trying to read as much as I can and i'll be giving comments soon but I'm just so busy :P Ill try to free up my time a bit though.

Reading Excuses / Re: Email List + Submission Dates
« on: July 01, 2009, 01:41:25 AM »
This looks great, I always wanted to be a part of something like this but since I live in a 'new' town a lot of these things really don't exist and the towns populace is mostly made up of foreigners trying to pursue their college goals.  (new jersey, alot of schools)

  (yes i know, weird email :P its an inside joke)

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