Timewaster's Guide Archive

Well, I think if we did the 3 group thing, we'd be splitting up the groups, once we know where everyone's at.

For example, let's say we've got 4 monthly submitters (Jim, Andy, Dwight, and Michael), 4 bi-weekly submitters (Angela, Pam, Phyllis, and Kelly), and 4 bi-weekly skipping submitters (Ryan, Stanley, Creed, and Toby). The submissions would go something like so:

1--Jim, Pam, Angela, Ryan, Stanley
8--Andy, Phyllis, Kelly, Creed, Toby
15--Dwight, Angela, Pam, Ryan, Stanley
23--Michael, Phyllis, Kelly, Creed, Toby

Or something like that....

Bonus points: The names are from....?

So, this Office reference pretty much earned you 10 cool points, in my book.

I'm up for it

Perhaps it would be wise to leave the option of submitting either monthly or bi-weekly.

I liked it. The world was intriguing, and the action was fun, especially the free-falling. That was definitely a part that grabbed my attention. I was able to get a decent visual of the environment, as well.

Most of the problems I noticed have already been brought up. I had trouble seeing the size/shape of the crystal they found. I didn't see why it wouldn't be a problem if they were seen on the way down. The climbing parts made me wonder, as well. The first thing I noticed was that you described the surface as crumbling, and yet you pointed out that they had to rely on barely visible hairline cracks. Unless these towers are of incredible workmanship, which it sounds like they may have been, I fail to see how that would be considered 'crumbling'.

While most of the dialogue, in my opinion, was good, there were moments when it didn't seem real. I agree with whoever said that their 'formalities' didn't seem all that formal.

Still, it was a very good start to a story. It got my attention. Well done!

Rules question here...
  It says that, although it is not following good etiquette to defend our work, we can make pointed questions. What would be the right way to do that? Should we post the question publicly, or just PM the person we want to ask the question to?

     I chuckled as I watched the man tumble down the marble steps leading up to the doors of the church. Maybe it was mean of me to laugh at something like that, but, well, you don't get a chance to chuckle at slapstick goodness like that every day.
     What was taking so long? When was this wedding going to get started? I grimaced as my belly shouted out its complaints about something I had eaten from the dumpster. I needed some real food. The savory scent of bacon tempted me to go into that chapel and eat to my heart's content, or, rather, my belly's, but I had to show restraint. I couldn't go in there just yet. My timing had to be perfect.
     I looked towards the chapel, then at my watch. My belly shouted at me once more, and I darted behind the dumpster, losing most of my moldy ham lunch.

I glanced at my watch before turning back to the dumpster. It was starting soon. Foraging through the trash, I went over the game plan in my head. My timing had to be perfect. ooh! this pizza box has a few crusts left in it! There would be no room for error. However, I had confidence in my plan. How many movies with wedding scenes had I watched? How many hours had I spent rehearsing my entrance? I was prepared. Nothing was going to stop me. Hey, there's a few drops of Mountain Dew left in this bottle! Oh boy!

I'm totally gonna be the dude that bursts through the doors at just the right moment and shouts, "I object!" and then I ride off into the sunset with bride, or something cool like that.... Then she says, "Um. . . who are you?" , and thus ends our short-lived romance.

well, hey, anything with exploding brains is good