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Pepperoni, Bacon (breakfast bacon, not canadian bacon) and either banana peppers or chopped garlic.
However, if you're ordering pizza for a pink unicorn (male or female), they like magical goblinberries with fairy dust on their pizza.

I think it's important to consider how long they would look at the girl with tight, revealing pants. There's a big difference between glancing quickly and letting your eyes linger a while.
I've heard it said that the first look at someone's body can be in a good way. A guy can look at a girl with tight pants and think. "She keeps in good shape", or something like that. Is that thought automatically tied to sexual thoughts? I think not. Can it be? Yes. If the guy keeps staring at miss tightpants he's likely to start thinking more about that good shape, and well, we know where it goes from there. In some cases, though, that train of thought can move pretty quickly.
As far as sex and religion goes, I'm going to agree with ryanjm that arguing about it would be like swimming up a waterfall. Everyone has their own beliefs on the matter, whether based on religion or not, and, especially in on a forum like this, I don't see it going far. However, I commend little_wilson  and reaves for defending their beliefs like that.
Anyhow, that's all I've got to say on the matter.

Something important to consider in the relationship between Vin and Elend is how Vin felt about the way noblemen slept with skaa women. Were I Elend, after the scene in the first book where Vin asks him if he had ever bedded skaa women, I'd sure as crap wanna treat her with a lot more respect, no matter how attractive I found her. To me, the fact that you never saw Elend "checkin' her out" showed how strong their relationship was. The books also put a large emphasis on the trust in their relationship.
I thought the amount of sexuality in the book was just right. You were aware that Breeze and Allriane had been sleeping together (Brandon even confirms that in his annotations of WoA), and there is a scene that happens after the (newlywed) Vin and Elend have been having sex. It doesn't dwell on those things, just mentions them in passing.
Also, whoever pointed out that a lot of the others were tied up (I'm too lazy to look through this small thread and quote it), had a point. Ham was married, Kelsier had once been married, and perhaps wanted to leave it at that.
Spook, though. I think he's a realistically portrayed male. When he's younger, you've got the awkward teen with a crush on Vin. In HoA, there's that one girl in the one place that he obviously is attracted to. . .  I don't remember her name and am too lazy to look it up. You know who I'm talkin about. It was made clear that Spook was very attracted to the girl in HoA, but you never heard him thinking "would you look at that booty, I'd like to . . . ". Even a teenage boy whose hormones are probably raging just as much as every other teenage boy's isn't automatically start thinkin sexual things about a girl he is attracted to. There's nothing unrealistic about the way men were depicted in Mistborn.

Thank you for your input.
I would like to point out that I have absolutely no intention of tossing out the story. I have done a fair amount of world building, and would like to, eventually, make it the setting of several stories. However, I feel that it would be the best for the story if I put it aside until I came up with a better idea for the plot.

First off: I would slog through and try to finish it (especially if you've never finished something before). You learn a lot from finishing a story, I think, even if it never goes anywhere after that. And if you finish it and it turns out badly, the hardest part is still done - you can always go back and fix it later.

I would like to be able to do that -- to just slog through it just to get it done -- but the problem there is in the speed I write. Especially with this new semester having started (I'm getting a lot more homework than the last semester) I don't get a lot of writing done at all. I felt like I'd be doing good if I got the story done in under a year. I personally feel like that would be a long time to be slogging through it.

However, I like the Silk's suggestion to ask the wonderful people of RE what expectations they have. Seeing as I have never been entirely sure where the story was going, I'd like to hear where other people thought the story was going. I may just do that. . .

However, my biggest complaint is that I had assumed that the boy who the men in the prologue were looking for would be the main character and so far it doesn’t seem that way. That in and of itself isn’t a complaint, but the fact that if he is as I suspect, then he probably should’ve been introduced in at least the second chapter—on one waits past chapter three for the introduction to the main character.

Okay, I'll go ahead and let you all know right now that the boy mentioned in the prologue is not the main character. He will be a very important one, but Boone is the main character.

I think you can make it work though, if since it's evident that he is already surrounded by people with guns.

That was exactly the reason he got away with it.

I was worried about how many names I was throwing out. There will be a lot of names to learn in this story, and I don't plan on changing that fact, but not all of the names brought up in this chapter are of any importance. If all goes well, mere repetition will make it clear which names are going to be important to the story (at this point, you should be seeing that the Archelaines and the Wingroves are some important names).  I guess what I'm trying to say is don't get too caught up on the names unless they are brought up frequently.
 Again, thanks, everyone, for the input.