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Thought I'd take a turn playing devil's advocate,
When Vin takes Zane's atium and uses it, you must remember that Zane had been subtly soothing and rioting her emotions for the whole time he's been around her (at least whenever she wasn't burning copper).  It doesn't say so in the book, but it does in the annotations, and when you reread carefully, you can see where she feels exactly the way Zane would want her to feel, thus, unless Yomen had someone soothing her (which I don't think he did because someone mentioned he had no allomancers other than himself), they aren't really the same scenario.
I don't think her chance at the pewter trick was out of character, I just think that Zane's atium can't be used as a precedent in this argument.

True, there isn't much for character in those.  It's pretty much all just Nevare. 
I didn't say they were my favorites, not by far, but I did enjoy them.

I like the 'Ying-Yang' aspect of it.  Was that intentional?

I read Wizard's First Rule.  I got it for christmas from a friend.  You know the page where other books by the author are listed?  He crossed them all out.  Personally, the defacing of books, whatever the reason, especially my own, bothers me, but I took the hint, and did not continue reading.  Frankly, while I enjoyed parts of Wizard's First Rule, on the whole, it did not constitue me going on in the series.  Unlike Wheel of Time.  I'm really getting into the Great Hunt!

I think his hair could be dyed, someone even put a picture of him with blond hair up here somewhere.  Once his gray hair is covered, and if you could him to shave, I bet he could pass for Kel's age.

Ummm, Ham is married.  But then again, he's away from his wife a lot.
Otherwise, yeah, I guess so.

Okay, for those of you who have been keeping up with me.

I'm trying to re work my magic system a bit, before I begin my rewrites.  I'm finding as a read through that the fire/water duality has become a pretty integral part of my story.  Any ideas on how I can keep that there, without being so typical?  I should not that the Auroks in my story so far are only utilizing the basics of their powers (it's all they can do).  Fire and Water are just the EASIST things they can manipulate.  The root of the magic system is that Aurok-Hals can manipulate matter, and Aurok-Hons can manipulate energy.

I wrote a new opening paragraph for the first chapter, and I like it.  I think it set's up the story a little more, and hints at the larger scope of the magic system.

@ Valkynphyre,
The dialogue wasn't too much was it?  I didn't think that the Desert Queen and the Earth Child should talk like regular people.  Maybe they did once, but not now. 
I'm glad the emotions showed through.
Which parts did you find particularily contrived, if you don't mind me asking?

Both.