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Reading Excuses / 3-23-09 Aspirations Miranda 5-6
« on: March 23, 2009, 05:26:21 AM »
Jason wandered through his grief, soothing his soul in alcohol. 
He met with a stranger, who gave him a mysterious ring.
This ring gave him a backhanded wish that, Jason, was unaware of.
He then goes on to find out that his inadvertent wish got him partially
married to a female vampire.  He also finds out that to complete the
marriage they have too consummate it.

Jason finds that his bride-to-be (Miranda) is not entirely pleased with the
situation.  Before they can attempt any reconciliation, Jason is abducted
and sent to Hell.  Jason has been given the task of collecting certain items
from this list, for a spell that will transfer his soul and the ring to the Deamion.
Jason then finds himself in a different place.  Where he encounters a pretty
young woman bound as a sacrifice.  Unfortunately, this woman is a spiting
image of his dead wife, Kim.  The woman guides Jason back to his own campfire…

Jason goes into the town of Gorstauk with Angel.
He meets her mother and finds out she does not like him, at all.
Jason wanders the town for a bit until he meets Angel’s father,
who then sells Jason what he needs/wants of supplies.
Thinking Angel would rather stay with her mother;
Jason moves on with his quest and gets lost.
He then meets back up with Angel,
who was to be married to Javik on her mother’s say-so.
Jason cries on her shoulder, the only friend in this world he has
Thinking of Kim, Miranda, and Angel; Jason falls into a troubled asleep…

Jason and Angela (I’ve changed her name for now) continue to search for
the rest of the reagents needed.  Along their journey, they are attacked by
Javik, who with his dieing breath lays a curse on Jason.  After the attack,
Angela begins to train Jason in the ways of magic.  After finding and in
Angela’s case discovering, they have all but one reagent left to gather, Eye of Newt.
Angela comes up with a plan that sets her up as bait to lure Newt into ambush.
Newt comes but not everything goes according to plan.  Jason sees Angela
swallowed after his spells seem to misfire.  He then chases after Newt to rescue her.
Jason finds Newt dieing in a clearing, compelled Jason hacks off Newt’s head
and eats Newt’s heart.  The magic that compelled him leaves after he’s done
and Jason loses consciousness…

Jason has had his battle with the Deamion, and won.
Most questions have been answered at this point,
but more questions have been introduced.
We now fade to Miranda…

(I will be separating and sorting out where and how I’ll introduce these different viewpoints.)

Miranda and Jason were attacked after they left dinner with her parents.  Using her own innate powers, Miranda tracks down the thug who made off with Jason's unconscious body.  Finally resorting to torture, she finds that the thug has no idea where Jason went.  After the surprise attack from the thug, Miranda uses up the last of her depleted reserves of power to heal herself.  Weak, in pain, and in no mood to deal with family issues; Miranda did not greet her father at that moment with her usual enthusiasm.

Miranda has found out that Jason has been sent to hell and she’s desperate to get him back.  Both because she loves him and because she’ll die if they don’t fulfill the terms of their contract.  Needing her fathers help, Miranda reluctantly agrees to his price and agrees to do a job for him working with him and her brothers Paul and Adam, her sister Rachael, and her mother.  But this first job will be for her alone…

Thanks for reading, your help is greatly appreciated!

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Writing Group / What would be cooler?
« on: March 23, 2009, 04:23:47 AM »
The ability to see the electrical impulses in a person’s nervous system. 

Or to be able to see body heat, which would also include any residual heat in their surroundings. 

All in the dark, of course.

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Reading Excuses / 3-9-09 Seven Seals
« on: March 09, 2009, 05:08:59 AM »
This is my attempt at Epic Fantasy.

I'll go back to Aspirations after this, but I'm getting ready to start on my next story and wanted to get a feel for which one I'll start with.

Anyway, thanks for reading and have fun with it!

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Reading Excuses / 3-2-09 Cradle of Life Chapters 1-2
« on: March 02, 2009, 09:08:55 PM »
Something a little different this time 'round.

Thanks for reading!

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Reading Excuses / 2-16-09 Aspirations Miranda chapters 2-3
« on: February 16, 2009, 05:02:35 AM »
Miranda and Jason were attacked after they left dinner with her parents.  Using her own innate powers, Miranda tracks down the thug who made off with Jason's unconscious body.  Finally resorting to torture, she finds that the thug has no idea where Jason went.  After the surprise attack from the thug, Miranda uses up the last of her depleted reserves of power to heal herself.  Weak, in pain, and in no mood to deal with family issues; Miranda did not greet her father at that moment with her usual enthusiasm.
—start dialogue—

Thanks for reading, blast away, and enjoy!

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Reading Excuses / Writing new languages
« on: February 12, 2009, 03:22:51 AM »
How would some of you approach this?  Reference languages in our “present” world?  Or just make up something whole cloth?

I’m kicking around the idea of just writing backwards. 

Sdraw kcab gnitirw tsuj fo aedi eht dnuora gnikcik mi.

Now me personally, I don't like the new language's then an interpretation.  So for me, this is just a way to convey confusion about what these other people are saying, by showing it.  What do y'all think?

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Reading Excuses / 2-09-09 Aspirations
« on: February 09, 2009, 06:50:37 AM »
Jason wandered through his grief, soothing his soul in alcohol. 
He met with a stranger, who gave him a mysterious ring.
This ring gave him a backhanded wish that, Jason, was unaware of.
He then goes on to find out that his inadvertent wish got him partially
married to a female vampire.  He also finds out that to complete the
marriage they have too consummate it.

Jason finds that his bride-to-be (Miranda) is not entirely pleased with the
situation.  Before they can attempt any reconciliation, Jason is abducted
and sent to Hell.  Jason has been given the task of collecting certain items
from this list, for a spell that will transfer his soul and the ring to the Deamion.
Jason then finds himself in a different place.  Where he encounters a pretty
young woman bound as a sacrifice.  Unfortunately, this woman is a spiting
image of his dead wife, Kim.  The woman guides Jason back to his own campfire…

Jason goes into the town of Gorstauk with Angel.
He meets her mother and finds out she does not like him, at all.
Jason wanders the town for a bit until he meets Angel’s father,
who then sells Jason what he needs/wants of supplies.
Thinking Angel would rather stay with her mother,
Jason moves on with his quest and gets lost.
He then meets back up with Angel,
who was to be married to Javik on her mother’s say-so.
Jason cries on her shoulder, the only friend in this world he has
Thinking of Kim, Miranda, and Angel; Jason falls into a troubled asleep…

Jason and Angela (I’ve changed her name for now) continue to search for
the rest of the reagents needed.  Along their journey, they are attacked by
Javik, who with his dieing breath lays a curse on Jason.  After the attack,
Angela begins to train Jason in the ways of magic.  After finding and in
Angela’s case discovering, they have all but one reagent left to gather, Eye of Newt.
Angela comes up with a plan that sets her up as bait to lure Newt into ambush.
Newt comes but not everything goes according to plan.  Jason sees Angela
swallowed after his spells seem to misfire.  He then chases after Newt to rescue her.
Jason finds Newt dieing in a clearing, compelled Jason hacks off Newt’s head
and eats Newt’s heart.    The magic that compelled him leaves after he’s done
and Jason loses consciousness…

Thanks for reading, have fun and blast away!

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Reading Excuses / Writing Prompt
« on: February 08, 2009, 03:41:51 AM »
Sometimes we get stuck, but it helps if you can just get something out there.  So, here is the writing prompt I propose:
Add one sentence to the one above (or that would follow in sequence) and see if it helps.  Remember the rules of the forum.  I'll start.



Looking around, Silvia thought that this might be some kind of cell, though she didn't remember ever having been in a prison.

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Reading Excuses / 1-26-09 Aspirations
« on: January 26, 2009, 06:15:53 AM »
Strong S, mild L, Strong V
Submission Summery:

Jason wandered through his grief, soothing his soul in alcohol. 
He met with a stranger, who gave him a mysterious ring.
This ring gave him a backhanded wish that, Jason, was unaware of.
He then goes on to find out that his inadvertent wish got him partially married to a female vampire.  He also finds out that to complete the marriage they have too consummate it.

Jason finds that his bride-to-be (Miranda) is not entirely pleased with the situation.
Before they can attempt any reconciliation, Jason is abducted and sent to Hell.
Jason has been given the task of collecting certain items from this list, for a spell that will transfer his soul and the ring to the Deamion.  Jason then finds himself in a different place.  Where he encounters a pretty young woman bound as a sacrifice.  Unfortunately, this woman is a spiting image of his dead wife, Kim.  The woman guides Jason back to his own campfire…

Jason goes into the town of Gorstauk with Angel.
He meets her mother and finds out she does not like him, at all.
Jason wanders the town for a bit until he meets Angel’s father,
who then sells Jason what he needs/wants of supplies.
Thinking Angel would rather stay with her mother,
Jason moves on with his quest and gets lost.
He then meets back up with Angel,
who was to be married to Javik on her mother’s say-so.
Jason cries on her shoulder, the only friend in this world he has
Thinking of Kim, Miranda, and Angel; Jason falls into a troubled asleep…

Thanks again for reading.  Blast away and have fun!

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Writing Group / Writing combat
« on: January 19, 2009, 08:43:51 AM »
I've been looking through some of the books I have in the hopes of writing a better fight scene.  It might just be me, but it seems that authors who have actually been in combat don't add too much description of...setting, for want of a better word.  What I mean is; besides what the view point character is doing/having done to them, everything else seems kind of sparse.

My question is this:  Am I imagining things?  Does this seem to be true?  Could this be why combat always seems to go by in a flash?

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Reading Excuses / 1-12-09 Aspirations
« on: January 12, 2009, 06:18:31 AM »
The fourth installment and...

A summary of sorts, or at least things that I wanted to accomplish.

Jason wandered through his grief, soothing his soul in alcohol.
He met with a stranger, who gave him a mysterious ring.
This ring gave him a backhanded wish that, Jason, was unaware of.
He then goes on to find out that his inadvertent wish got him partially married to a female vampire.  He also finds out that to complete the marriage they have too consummate it.
Jason finds that his bride-to-be (Miranda) is not entirely pleased with the situation.
Before they can attempt any reconciliation, Jason is abducted and sent to Hell.
Jason has been given the task of collecting certain items from this list, for a spell that will transfer his soul and the ring to the Deamion.  Jason then finds himself in a different place.  Where he encounters a pretty young woman bound as a sacrifice.  Unfortunately, this woman is a spiting image of his dead wife, Kim.  The woman guides Jason back to his own campfire…

Blast away, have fun, and thank you for reading!  ;D

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Reading Excuses / 12-29-08 Aspirations
« on: December 29, 2008, 06:13:22 AM »
Hello all!  Time for round three.  I've done the synopsis (very brief) and added a short message about my change of pov.

Thank you one and all for reading!

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Reading Excuses / A poll for "Just a thought"
« on: December 18, 2008, 04:26:58 AM »
This is a poll of Silk's question in "Just a thought."  I just thought it would be easier to keep up with if we had it (the votes) here.

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Reading Excuses / 12-15-08 Aspirations
« on: December 15, 2008, 06:12:58 AM »
Since it was decided that we could submit more if we are ready, well here goes round 2.  Red Ring!

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Movies and TV / Will your show be Canceled?
« on: December 11, 2008, 03:07:18 AM »
If these shows have a lot of viewers, why cancel them?

http://tv.yahoo.com/blog/when-will-canceled-tv-shows-leave-the-air--54

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