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Reading Excuses / Re: Would you prefer...
« on: June 19, 2010, 02:21:28 PM »
I'll also say all at once.
A lot of people describe Scalzi’s Old Man's War novels as military science fiction, but I would classify its sequel Zoë’s Tale as a space opera. It’s a story about, well, Zoë, a teenage girl whose parents are invited to take leadership roles in building a colony on a new planet. Zoë is an enthusiastic member of the group sent to colonize Roanoke, despite the risks—and the risks are considerable even before the political machinations of greater powers boil to the surface. Continue reading Zoë’s Tale
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The cathedral was massive and how the Church had found the resources to build such a magnificent work of architecture with howling gargoyles and carved buttresses of marble and granite.
The woman he searched for
Your essence is inside the sword, and your opponent will sense this. Your body will not become invisible, but your enemy will have a hard time noticing it. All its attention will be fixed on your blade
The anger Kajsa is seeing isn't directed at her, but at Reginn. When he turns his back on her and leaps from the stand, its not to get away from her, its to go kick Reginns ass.
But maybe I didn't pull this off well?
I'm wondering if making it more of an internal struggle as Kail tries to figure out what's happening with the glow he's seeings, etc will help solve the problem. That and possible splitting up the chapter in two.
Chapter 2 - In which we learn more about Naalim, why they're so scary, and a little bit more of life in Hell.
and two other places would sound too much like D&D Planescape
The reason I pulled back from going nuts with the setting is that "The Name of God," had such a rich setting, and it was really confusing to people. So I thought I would try something less wild and pull back. But then maybe I should have just gone wilder.
I also, am late for dinner, but I wanted to add my two cents if you are still looking for feedback.