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Reading Excuses / Feb 22 Erik Holmes - The Sword of Worlds CH 23 - Kajsa
« on: February 24, 2010, 06:33:17 AM »
Sorry for being late, I just needed an extra day to finish it up. This chapter really ran away with me. I'd say only about 10% of it was planned. Hopefully it's a good thing.

I should probably mention that this chapter contains scenes of clothing being ripped and pulled off.

Thanks for reading!

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Reading Excuses / Feb 15 Erik Holmes - The Sword of Worlds CH 22 - Ellie
« on: February 16, 2010, 06:50:33 AM »
Next Ellie chapter.

I'm not sure if this is done yet or if it needs more. It seemed like a decent place to stop at though.

Thanks for reading!

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Reading Excuses / Feb 8 - The Sword of Worlds CH 21 - Kail
« on: February 07, 2010, 11:09:54 PM »
I won't be around tomorrow so I figured I'd post early rather than late for once!

Recap:
Kajsa has been wounded and is dying from the iron in her blood. She has told Kail that the only one who could save her is here father, who lives in a mountain several days travel away. Kail has no choice but to try and carry Kajsa there on foot, even though she has said she won't last another 24 hours.

Thanks for the comments!

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Everything Else / Velma Survives the Zombie Apocalypse!
« on: February 03, 2010, 11:19:32 PM »
This so needs to be a movie . . .

http://cadhla.livejournal.com/1696183.html

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Reading Excuses / Feb 2 Erik Holmes - The Sword of Worlds CH 20 - Ellie
« on: February 02, 2010, 10:25:59 PM »
Thanks for the comments!

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Reading Excuses / Jan 4th - The Sword of Worlds - CH 19 - Kail
« on: January 06, 2010, 01:07:14 AM »
Back to Kail and Kajsa. They've entered the village where Ellie was captured.

Rated G--for Gore! Blood, killing and severed heads thrown around the room.

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Reading Excuses / Dec 7th - The Sword of Worlds - CH 18 - Ellie
« on: December 08, 2009, 03:58:59 AM »
Silk said I could go ahead and post as long as I posted how she defeated me over in the Dueling league thread. So here is my next installment.

To recap:

Kail and Ellie are two teens who've been transported to a world out of myth and legend by a magic sword. They were separated and now are searching to find each other.

Kail has met and begun to fall in love with a Troll, who he now travels with, trying to find Ellie.

Ellie has befriended a giant talking wolf named Bloodbath. While searching for Kail she was captured by an army and Bloodbath was wounded. She was then taken in by a fae queen named Morrigan and forced to travel with them.

Ellie is in possession of a set of magic rings which grant her inhuman strength, speed and endurance. She is also carrying the Sword of Worlds.

As always, thanks for all of the help!

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Not a lot of changes to this chapter, but enough that I'd like to see if you think I've improved it.

Thanks for the comments as always!

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I'm still alive!

New addition to the family kept me pretty busy for a few weeks but I should start cranking them out again.

While I had a break I had time to think about a few things for my book. The biggest hole in the book I was seeing was the whole Kail getting shot and Ellie running off to get him help thing. I gave this some thought and finally came to the conclusion that the best way to solve the problem was just to have Kail and Ellie separated as soon as they travel to the new world.

So chapter seven will be rewritten with Kail and Ellie somehow getting separated, leaving Ellie to believe that Kail has traveled to or was taken by someone to the village she can see in the distance.

Anyway, I hope you enjoy and as always thanks for the help!

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Movies and TV / I think this might be the best movie ever filmed . . .
« on: October 07, 2009, 10:04:50 PM »
Filmed in Cinemaphonic Quadrovision:

http://www.imdb.com/video/imdb/vi896205337/

And if that isn't good enough, here's the Dojo scene:

http://www.imdb.com/video/imdb/vi1196360473/


Who the hell is interrupting my Kung Fu!

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Everything Else / I have spawned once more!
« on: September 04, 2009, 01:20:16 PM »
This is my newest daughter Piper. She was born yesterday at 1:30 PM, 7 lbs 8 ounces. 22 inches tall!


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Two rewrites in this submission.

So I gave it a lot of thought and decided to rewrite the last Ellie Chapter. I'm a lot happier with this version.

I also rewrote the scene's when Kail and Kajsa leave to go find Ellie and turned it into its own chapter. The Chapter really just covers the first few hours of their journey, before they get to the poisoned tree. My main concern is that it might be too info-dumpy.

I'm also trying to work out way to get the plot going a little earlier. I'm still working on how to accomplish that, but one step I took was to add the following bit of dialog to the chapter where Kail and Kajsa first meet. It takes place while they are trading questions back and forth. Let me know if you think it might help:

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“Malrune,” she corrected. “They are very hard to learn, but I will try. Now go sit, rest, and I will make us something to eat.”

“But I still have questions . . .”

“But I’m hungry . . .” She countered. Then she sighed, “One more question.”

I asked the one that bothered me the most; the one I wanted answered the most. “Kajsa, who is it that wants that sword. Is it worth everything that’s happened? They—they killed my best friend trying to get that damn sword.”

Kajsa set down the carrots she had fetched and looked over at me, her features softened and she nodded. “Yes. If only half the rumors I’ve heard about that weapon are true then it is worth it. If you’re friend died trying to keep it out of the wrong hands then it was a noble death, one worthy of song. As a weapon it is said to be irresistible, capable of slaying any foe. But as a tool . . . it is even more dangerous.”

“What nation can stand against a foe that can bring an army to its doorstep in an instant, behind its defenses? Or how do you defeat a foe who can retreat at any time to a place of strength and sustenance? How many resources could one collect from a thousand worlds?”

She picked the carrots back up and started to wash them. “To answer your question Kail: Everyone wants that sword.”

“Now, enough questions. Rest. You look tired.”

Thanks for reading, as always!



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Everything Else / A Love Letter . . .
« on: September 01, 2009, 12:19:05 AM »

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Everything Else / Obama's Health Care plan
« on: August 25, 2009, 05:36:20 PM »
So I was looking up stuff on Obama's Health Care plan and came across this article. I thought it was 'interesting' and thought I might share. Flame me if you must . . .


THE ONE WORD TO DESCRIBE OBAMACARE
Written by Dr. Dave Janda
Thursday, 23 July 2009

As a physician who has authored books on Preventative Health Care and Health Care Cost Containment, I was recently given the opportunity to be the keynote speaker at a Congressional Dinner at The Capitol Building in Washington D.C... The presentation, entitled Health Care Reform; The Power & Profit of Prevention was well received.

In preparation for the presentation, I read the latest version of "reform" as authored by The Obama Administration and supported by Speaker Pelosi and Senator Reed. It is important to realize that The Obama Health Care Plan is comprised of two parts ... that's right, not one but two parts.

The first part of The Obama Health Care Plan was buried in The Stimulus Bill which was signed into law by the President in February (see http://www.readthestimulus.org/ ). It is the second part of The Health Care Plan which is now being debated in Congress. Below is the link to the over 1000 page document.....

http://edlabor.house.gov/documents/111/pdf/publications/AAHCA-BillText-071409.pdf

Let me summarize just a few salient points of the two part Obama Health Care Plan. Warning.......They need to put the same warning on The Obama Health Care Plan as they do a pack of cigarettes.....Consuming this product WILL be hazardous to your health.

The underlying method of cutting costs throughout the plan is based on rationing and denying care, NOT PREVENTING health care need. The plan's method is the most inhumane and unethical approach in cutting costs. The rationing of care is implemented through a Council, equivalent to the National Health Care Board in the British Health Care System. The name given to this panel is The Federal Coordinating Council For Comparative Effectiveness Research ("Federal Council"). (Section 9201 H.R. 1 Version of the Stimulus Bill.)

President Obama has already appointed the fifteen member Federal Council. According to the Stimulus Bill, p. 152, all members of the Council must be "senior federal officers or employees." Thus, medical treatment will be dispensed by a group of bureaucrats from their ivory towers, not by the hands-on practitioners in the presence of the patients. The council was funded with $1.1 BILLION from The Stimulus Bill. (http://www.hhs.gov/recovery/programs/os/cerbios.html )

"Comparative Effectiveness Research" is based on the formula of the approval or rejection of treatment for patients based upon the cost per treatment divided by the number of years the patient will benefit from the treatment.

According to former New York Lieutenant Governor and Health Policy Analyst Dr. Betsy McCaughey, the Federal Council will set a cost effectiveness standard for treatment. (Stimulus Bill p. 464) Translation.....if you are over 65 or have been recently diagnosed as having an advanced form of cardiac disease or aggressive cancer, dream on if you think you will get treated.....pick out your box. Oh, you say...this could never happen. Sorry....this is the same model they use in Britain.

The plan also empowers the Federal Council to create another level of bureaucracy, The Center for Comparative Effectiveness Research. (Health Care Bill, Section 1181, p. 502). The effect of this extra level of bureaucracy is to slow the development of new medications and technologies in order to reduce costs. How special is that!

The plan also outlines that doctors and hospitals will be overseen and reviewed by The National Coordinator of Health Information Technology. This "Coordinator" will be responsible for monitoring treatments to make sure doctors and hospitals are strictly following what the government deems appropriate and cost effective, and to "guide medical decisions at the time and place of care." (Stimulus Bill, p. 116; see also pp. 442, 446).

The Stimulus Bill goes on to say that hospitals and doctors that are NOT "meaningful users" of the new systems will face penalties. The Secretary of Health and Human Services will be empowered to impose "more stringent measures of meaningful use over time." (Stimulus Bill pp. 366, 478, 511, 518, 540, 541.) According to those in Congress, penalties could include large six figure financial fines and possible imprisonment. According to the Obama Plan, if your doctor saves your life but breaks government protocol, you might have to go to the prison to see your doctor for follow -up appointments. I believe this is the same model Stalin used in the former Soviet Union.

In Section 102 of the Health Care Plan has the Orwellian title: "Protecting the Choice to Keep Current Coverage." What this section really mandates is that it is ILLEGAL for you to keep your private insurance if your status changes, e.g., if you lose or change your job, become a senior citizen, graduate from college and land their first job. Yes, illegal. When President Obama was asked about this portion of his plan recently, his response was, "I am not familiar with that part of the plan."

Obama hosted a conference call with bloggers urging them to pressure Congress to pass his health plan as soon as possible.

During the call, a blogger from Maine said he kept running into an Investors Business Daily article that claimed Section 102 of the House health legislation would outlaw private insurance. He asked: "Is this true? Will people be able to keep their insurance and will insurers be able to write new policies even though H.R. 3200 is passed?" President Obama replied: "You know, I have to say that I am not familiar with the provision you are talking about."

Then there is Section 1233 of the Health Care Bill, devoted to "Advanced Care Planning." After each American turns 65 years of age they have to go to a mandated counseling program that is designed to end life sooner. This session is to occur every 5 years unless the person has developed a chronic illness then it must be done every year. The topics in this government run session will include how to decline hydration, nutrition and how to initiate hospice care. It is no wonder the Obama Administration does NOT like my emphasis on Prevention. Under the Health Care Plan for cost containment, Prevention is the "enemy," since people would live longer.

I rest my case....The Health Care Plan authored by Obama / Pelosi / Reed is hazardous to the health of every American.

In the question/answer session following my Capitol Hill presentation, a Congressman asked: "I am doing a number of network interviews next week on the Obama Health Care Plan. If I am asked what is the one word to describe the plan, what should I answer?"

The answer is simple, honest, direct, analytical, and sad, but truthful. The word is FASCIST.

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