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Writing Group / Re: Unbiased opinions on my novel in progress
« on: October 04, 2007, 07:36:06 AM »
The final scene in chapter 1 created some tension and intrigue, though I nearly caught ADHD getting to that point. I agree with the feedback already given. The story has the feel of a vehicle starting forward then jerking to a halt. It needs to compel us, driving us smoothly forward in anticipation. Other than that, I believe the concept is great. Just find your hook. It's there somewhere.
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