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Reading Excuses / January 24 Hubay, Lord Domestic Ch4
« on: January 25, 2011, 12:12:51 AM »
Here you go, sorry for the wait. I'm pretty pleased with this chapter overall, but I have two things I was hoping to get feedback on is the description of the Medusi clear? And I resolve the first main character crisis with Jhuz in this chapter, and I was wondering if anyone thinks I should have drawn it out a little longer. Anyways:
Hubay Lord Domestic Ch. 4 (L,V, S if you know Latin) 3900 words
Summary after a heavy defeat to a barbarian army, the Imperial Legion is on the run in forest. They have made camp on the edge of a river, and the Standard Jhuz is still feeling guilty over his 'cowardice' in the first battle.
Ch 4 a messenger from Matisu brings ill-timed news, the barbarians attack again, and we meet our first barbarian.
Hubay Lord Domestic Ch. 4 (L,V, S if you know Latin) 3900 words
Summary after a heavy defeat to a barbarian army, the Imperial Legion is on the run in forest. They have made camp on the edge of a river, and the Standard Jhuz is still feeling guilty over his 'cowardice' in the first battle.
Ch 4 a messenger from Matisu brings ill-timed news, the barbarians attack again, and we meet our first barbarian.