There's quite a bit of passive voice going on. Ex. "was leaning", "had flung." Instead just use "leaned, flung, flew, etc".
The first sentence of the third paragraph (which really is the first sentence) was too passive for me as well.
"The camp for now was quiet which was an unusual occurrence, usually the clamor of men at arms or the screaming of prisoners could be heard throughout the night, preventing a sleep that was filled with its own breed of deathly melody."
I think something similar to this would work better:
"The camp was unusually quiet. The silence screamed in her ears. Sleep was a struggle without the cries of prisoners or the clash of weapons. Sleep, devoid of its deathly melody would not come."
Your language is flowery, but I don't think that's issue. I liked it. There were numerous places with dialogue that had missing punctuation. Also, I think that usually the standard format is Courier or Times New Roman, double spaced. I didn't mind the different font, but the single spaced is harder to read.
You used the word forced three times nearly right in a row. I would suggest using it once and finding different words for the other portions.
I agree with Akoebel, you should lose the first paragraph. The second paragraph you could keep where it is, but I think it would be better as a quotation before the piece begins. It works in nicely at the end. That was well done. I also liked that it wasn't enough. Never make it too easy for the characters :-)