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Brandon Sanderson / Re: Warbreaker: Free Ebook
« on: January 11, 2007, 08:29:24 PM »
I agree with Matt (DreamKing) about the Show versus Tell issue with Vivenna and perhaps that is why I was left wanting a bit with chpt 41. Even if we are told part of it her reason to go into that alley and for it to be abandoned so appropriately... well it's too convenient. It is one she haunts and Vasher has figured it out and it is obvious that Denth knows and is smart enough to have hired muscle to get her captured seeing we are not seeing Tonk Fah or Denth there to be potentially killed. Too many people are onto her and Vivenna unwitting yet again. (She is beginning to annoy m at this point.) She is smarter than that and there are only so many times you can be played a fool before becoming wary of traps such as this.
A glance down the empty alley should have tipped her off no matter how tired and hungry she was not to mention despite small things like comfort that she is seeking a distraction of some sort would be welcome. To keep her from noticing, a smell of something enticing or not.
I don't know... perhaps a different POV would be more interesting for the chapter. Vasher's would be my choice. I'd love to get into his head and get a peak of WHY he is doing this, because he is still such an enigma and I tire of Vivenna. Then follow it up with Vivenna reacting to what has happened and she and Vasher hashing things out from her POV.
A glance down the empty alley should have tipped her off no matter how tired and hungry she was not to mention despite small things like comfort that she is seeking a distraction of some sort would be welcome. To keep her from noticing, a smell of something enticing or not.
I don't know... perhaps a different POV would be more interesting for the chapter. Vasher's would be my choice. I'd love to get into his head and get a peak of WHY he is doing this, because he is still such an enigma and I tire of Vivenna. Then follow it up with Vivenna reacting to what has happened and she and Vasher hashing things out from her POV.