Timewaster's Guide Archive

This is the first book of Brandon's that I have read, and I have to say that it's a very good advert, I'm now intending to buy Mistborn and Elantris the when I next have a decent amount of free time.

Having said that, there are a few problems with it.

Ignoring typos as I know this is a draft, a few issues strike me:

Do returned get hungry and have to eat? Lightsong says that they don't, but then Susebron seams to suggest that he often gets hungry at night, and sends for food when the whole thing about Siri being hungry from growing her hair comes up. I personally think it would be better without the idea of the returned not needing food.

I will take a stab at some of your questions:

I think they don't need to eat but then they may still desire to eat. If they had to eat then they would die without food.

What's up with the God Kings vanishing after they have children, if as is suggested at the end the priests aren't guilty of foul play, what happens to the God Kings?

I understood this to mean that the extra breaths were removed in a way that the priest died before he could reveal it. Then the God King just becomes a regular returned. I am sure Vasher or someone knows how to remove all the extra breaths that the God King has.

I don't think Vasher is explained properly, how can he use the command to give his breaths (on Denth) away without giving his "divine breath"? I thought it always gave everything.

Well he did give away everything and became a drab (or whatever they were called) just as Viveena did at one point. He has some breaths in clothing that he used to get some back later but it was kind of a neat trick. He could not, of course, get back what he gave Denth. Only the returned died when they gave away their breaths.

Also the book seemed to lack polish in a few places, it didn't seem to flow quite right,  from time to time, but I'm sure you're editor will be able to help you far more than me on this, I'm a reader not an editor or writer.

Dale