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Okay, here are 3 images I put together really quckly in Illustrator.

Make a story out of them.

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"Lala deda teda." "Snort, cough, Grunt."  "Yaaaawwnn." "Don't not wake."  "Haha, take that you scallywag!"

Let me start by saying that I like it.  It’s interesting, what seems to be the beginnings of a magic sys are intriguing, and for the most part, it flows well.  But...

1:  Sun+hammer(to me)=desert
2:  Fresh air and breeze?  Boinked my thought of it being a desert
3:  Finally, with the crystal, what is it?  Maybe more description.  Alternatively, maybe a different name than crystal, it’s not like any crystal I've heard of, and that rather throws me off.  Is it a geode, with crystal inside?  What is the cocoon, and why is it there?

The story itself is appealing, and I look forward to other posts you might put up if you continue with this story.

http://www.efuse.com/Design/wa-voice.html

http://www.ttms.org/writing_quality/voice.htm

Here are two sites I found that explained 'voice' from a teaching prospective.

Edit:  http://www.write101.com/lethamfind.htm

Anyways, I am interested in what people are saying since I drew those three images rather quickly and couldn't really quite see how they relate.

I kept thinking of something like:
panel 1 "I'm so glad to fly away from his cliche place..."
panel 2 "...my ignorant boyfriend..."
panel 3 ".. and those boring teaparties."

As my wife often tells me, I am way too serious.  So in trying to connect the three panels, some kind of crisis kept coming to mind.
My humor would tend to be more cynical, and frankly, more disturbing than would be appropriate.  Therefore, I didn't think along those lines, instead, I decided upon some sort of 'Epic' type theme.

Hey ya’ll,
My name is Ben, and I live in Athens, GA.  I'm currently working to put my wife through school.  (Vet Med)  I discovered this site through Writing Excuses.  Because of them (Brandon, Dan, and Howard), I have re-discovered my passion for writing.  I have no illusions as to how good I might be, but I do have fun and hope to be able to contribute some useful advice.  Plans for the future, when my wife graduates I will return to school and get my MD/PH.D, (to work for the CDC hopefully).  Necroben came from looking at a Brian Lumley novel title, Necroscope.  Translated I think it means Been Dead(?).

Flowers for Algernon was a story about someone who was severely retarded going through an experimental treatment to cure him.  The main point of the reference was that the reader followed along from the patients POV.  (The Dr. had him keep a journal.)  We got to see him as he progressed through the treatments, and get smarter as he went along.

1: The followers of this 'way' - 'the way of enlightenment' seek to understand themselves fully. To truly comprehend and understand each and every one of their actions in the light of past events. When then experience an emotion, they examine it and tries to determine where it came from and what past experiences has led to the feeling and the reactions in the first place. Only by truly knowing oneself, knowing why one act as one does will we be free. Only by truly knowing our past, and thus truly understanding the road we will travel in the future, will we be free to experience the way there. Absolved from the choices of the future by already knowing the outcomes of them we can partake in the enlightenment the journey will bring us.

That one part was rife with possibilities.  I love it: the thought of taking someone at birth and then molding him or her to ' determinist's' ideals, then shaping that person's experiences just to prove that they may predict someone’s possible future actions.
That was the one thing that jumped out at me: Telling the story in first person, kind of a Flowers for Algernon. (sp?)

The thing here being.  In the entire existence of the human race everything we come up with has probably been done at one point.  Even if it was just by a small group of people.

That might be true, but the point I beleive is to make us think in a certain way.  See things in a different light maybe?  Many authors mistreat religion/spirtuality by not understanding where it is it comes from, and how to represent it correctly.  Although... I could be totaly wrong of course.