You've presented Juno's thoughts, as she's being escorted away by the Marines for interrogation, very nicely here; the revelation that the Marines are actually afraid of her, and just how ludicrous that seems.
Okay, just to be clear: The captain Juno is talking to IS von Bredow, yes? I assume so, but I'm not entirely certain. Though maybe this is only a result of the fragmented way in which I'm reading the piece.
I really like the way you're presenting Juno's abilities here; the way she has trouble distinguishing between her own emotions and von Bredow's (and it's good that you keep stuff like that subtle) is effective, but I like the pervasiveness of it as well. When she first leaves her cell she feels like she's practically bathing in the fear of all the Marines. I could see that really driving a person nuts. I hope you take advantage of it at some point.
For the record: I also want to punch Morris in the face.
Instead of asking for him to be transferred, can't von Bredow just recommend that he be scrapped?
I'm impressed by the development von Bredow is making here. If memory serves, he was pretty unsympathetic at first, so it's nice to see this other side of him. This, of course, doesn't mean that I think his unsympatheticness should go away.
Yes, I know that's not a word. I don't care.