Timewaster's Guide Archive

Most of the history classes I took in college were art history. But that still gives a good sense ot time and place.

I'm really just a big Templar history geek -- both actually history as well as some of the various conpemporary conspiracy theories. Suffice to say there was very little in The Da Vinci Code that I hadn't already read about.

The main trick to knowing lots of stuff is to read constantly and get old. The later part is easy enough, but the first part can be tough.

Greetings Cathar! Glad to have an Albigensian in the group. Luckily, I'm not in the mood for a crusade right now.

And here I thought submission required goat leggings, some chicken gizzards and some Zamphir pan flute music?!?

Or was that latex pants and a riding crop?! I always get them comfused!

Go ahead! Rip into it!! You know you want to! In fact I'll challenge you to critique this!

And don't feel unqualified because it is in screenplay format. I'm mostly interest in what you think if the story and dialogue, which should translate easy enough.

Write on, my friends, write on...

Quote from: Karl Montoya on December 26, 2008, 10:23:37 PM

My 1.23 cents worth (devalued even with bailout).

  That really made me laugh....too funny Karl

Glad to know at least my humor, if not my stock portfolio, has some value! 

My, what a bucket of cheer to warm the night! But I sure liked it.

Raethe -- the use of "I had done" or "we had done" tends to be a Brit way of speaking. At least that's how I took it. And my few friends in the UK tend to talk like that. But it may still sound odd to us North Americans. However, it doesn't hurt Hayley to be aware of it.

I like your various uses of sense memory -- smells or sights that invoked tender or painful past events. With that in mind, is there a way to use a similar technique to avoid using the actual words "alone" or "lonely"? You sort of do it when you describe the empty spaces where something used to be. If you expand on that a bit you could give the impression of being very alone without having to tell us as much.

My one guilty addmission: I had to look up the word "duvet". Can't say I've ever heard that word before, believe it or not.

Like maxonennis, I am one who advocates sucking it up and moving on. However, I can still empathise with this character because there are times when, if for a short while, the depression can overcome a person. This works in a short story, but would not work in anything much longer.

My only real complaint is with the last paragraph. I guess I associate people outside talking with daytime. Perhaps you could separate out your description of the streetscape and expand on it a little bit. I wasn't aware this was an urban location, therefore would not expect much nighttime disturbances.

Also, the last paragraph was a bit of an abrupt ending to the story.

I am flattered that you think I sound like Han Solo. Especially when I'm delivering his lines!

Your lack of [geek reference knowledge] is disturbing...

I'd better hop on the band wagon. Sign me up for Monday. I've got plenty o'yarn to tell.