First off, I'd like to apologize for any spellingmistakes or "weirdness" in my post. I understand the english language, but I do not possess any skill when it comes to actually using it myself
6am and I still haven't slept, that could also be a factor!
Amazing read Mr. Sanderson; I really enjoyed it. I should say straight away that I haven't read the earlier versions of "Warbreaker" so I have nothing to compare with... having said that though, I must say that it was an impressive read, especially to be a draft.. A few things that struck me during the story - things that you may disagree with or things you have intentionally left as they are - but here they are:
- I really wished for a discription of the protagonists' faces. I realize that the point is for the readers to create images that they themselves find pleasing, but as a reader I really want some kind of input from the Creator of the story. It needn't be more than a mention of Siri's eyecolor or Blushweaver's high cheekbones and small dignified nose. It's not necessary for the smaller characters, but personally I would've liked a couple of the main characters to have some more discription (but I may be weird). Siri turned out quite beautiful inside my head, but some parts of her face was blurred...
- Some scenes were extraordinarily exciting:
I loved the part where Vivenna stumbled upon Parlin's body and realized that the mercenaries weren't her friends afterall. I would've liked a bigger shock factor though, because even though I was left with great satisfaction after reading it, I felt the effect could've been stronger had there been greater shock. I don't know if you've read Terry Goodkind's books (some look upon his work unfavorably***), but the effect I mean is when Kahlan is forced to give oral stimulation to another man than her husband so that he may gain entry to the Temple of Winds, but then the lighting flashes and you see the color of Richard's (her husband's) eyes in the flash. I felt my whole body growing cold in that instance. [**and now I do as well having read another post here on the forum that linked to an interview where he said some very distasteful things..]
- A frustrating thing about the Mistborn series, for me personally, was the lack of natural intimacy between Vin and her Husband. It was puzzling, even when taking into account Vin's personality problems (selfdoubt etc). This was much better in Warbreaker. Siri's and Suse's relationship as it slowly increased in potency was beautifully written. I would perhaps enjoy just a tad more focus on it though.
- Now this one is probably just me. I would absolutely love a longer epilogue; I liked it the way it was, but one from Siri's viewpoint would be fantastic. The ending as a whole felt slightly rushed in my honest opinion. I wish the part when Vasher revealed himself and onwards could be more fleshed out. A shockfactor would be great as well, and a reaction from the people in the room (a big one:P ) .
You're a fantastic author, and I hope you continue writing (preferrably in this genre) for decades to come. What a wonderful imagination! The pacing was great; all the characters were fantastic, the story was engaging and nothing was clichè. The magic system was innovative and fun (and had great negative consequences in some cases). I sincerely believe you are the absolute best in creating magical systems in your books. The humor was laugh-out-loud great. Thank you for the opportunity of allowing us to read this, I will definately buy the finished product and continue buying your books. I can see from the quality of your work that you won't disappoint. Sad that I, along with so many others, had to discover you through a tragedy. Life goes on however...[/size]