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I've Just read Warbreaker 4.2 and I really enjoyed it, I'll be buying it when it comes out in hardback, since I don't like paperbacks. I have a tendency to read stories I like to death and I can getting much more mileage out of a good hardback (or more accurately, after a year or two I will still have what can still be technically classified as a book).

I'm really not very good with words, since I'm terrible at all forms of translating thoughts into a medium that is anywhere near coherent enough so that others can understand, so I ask you to forgive me beforehand.

Just two things during my reading that distracted me enough to pulled me out of the story, perhaps minor things, but significant enough to me that I thought I'd mention them.

1)
Ch1 pg13
Fortunately, her father had four living children, and Siri--at seventeen years of age--was the youngest. Fafen, the daughter just older than Siri, had done the family duty and become a monk. Above Fafen was Ridger, the eldest son. He would inherit the throne. And then there was Vivenna.

This suggest that the age of the four siblings, from youngest to oldest is Siri>Fafen>Ridger>Vivenna.

Ch44 Pg305
Ridger was right above me.
Then there was Fafen.
“After Fafen,” Siri said, “there’s just the eldest, Vivenna.

This suggest that the age of the four siblings, from youngest to oldest is Siri>Ridger>Fafen>Vivenna.

Am I misunderstanding one of the sections? and if not, could to tell me which one is it since it made me stop reading and had me jumping back and forth and rereading each part a few times trying to figure it out. As I said, probably a minor thing.

2)
Ch43 Pg293
He didn’t reply. “The BioChromatic Breaths you had,” he said. “You gave them to Denth?” She paused, thinking. “Yes.” He glanced at her, raising an eyebrow. “No,” she admitted, looking away. “I put them in the shawl I was wearing.”

He raised an eyebrow. “You escaped those ropes of mine without Awakening them?” She shook her head. “I guessed that Command.”

He just shook his head, pointing toward the shawl. “Your Breath to mine,” he said. “That’s the Command you want.” She laid her hand on the shawl and said the words. Immediately, everything changed.

Here you remind me that both the shawl and the rope have had breath put into them, but only show the breath in the shawl being recovered.
This left me a little excited with the feeling that the breath in the rope will be mildly important later on.

Ch46 Pg310
Time to practice, then, she thought, returning to the room. Inside, she pulled out a piece of rope--the one that Vasher had used to tie her up, the first thing that she had Awakened. She’d since retrieved the Breath from it.

Then 3 chapters later that I am just told that the breath in the rope was simply recovered earlier.
Once again perhaps a minor thing but it made me stop reading and think "Oh.........why didn't it just say that earlier?"
I was a little disappointed at how anti-climactic it was and it left me a little tainted in regards to plot items about forgotten breaths in object discovered at a later time.

Ch56 Pg379
His cloak slid slightly off his shoulder, falling against her cheek.
It couldn’t be, she thought. I escaped from him. I tried to Awaken his cloak, but used a bad Command. Could he have been dumb enough to keep wearing it?

Because I had been tainted earlier, instead of thinking "Oh! Nice one!" it reminded me of the disappointment from earlier and my mind I simply thought "Meh." and ruined this scene slightly for me.

I don't mean to criticise, just offering some feedback.

Thank you for giving me the opportunity to read one of your books for free to see if I would enjoy your writing style and I have enjoyed it immensely.

I look forward to purchasing and reading Misborn, and should I enjoy those, your other books as well.