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Reading Excuses / Re: 08/22/2011 - Mad_Scientist - Apostle of Death (V)
« Last post by Mad_Scientist on August 23, 2011, 04:47:15 AM »Ok, resent the email and this time the .doc file is actually attached.
Max is a Shadowblade, a supernatural--and supernaturally competent--warrior bound to protect her witch Giselle. As a Shadowblade, Max doesn't age. She is better, faster, stronger than any ordinary human being. And she hates it. Giselle betrayed her trust to make Max what she is, and though she is magically compelled to protect Giselle and follow orders, Max works against her witch in every way she can. Continue reading Bitter Night
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The hackers must have re-hacked it more recently, since I changed my email address on this account this last month, and that spreadsheet has my new email.
EDIT: It'd be funny if we could get this guy banned from Blogger for posting personal information.
My email is there as well, and I only joined this forum in June, so yes, definitely a more recent hack than just April.
For this week, I am sending a short story I wrote recently: "Apostle of Death."
Was it just me/my account, or was there no story attached to the email?
For this week, I am sending a short story I wrote recently: "Apostle of Death."
The hackers must have re-hacked it more recently, since I changed my email address on this account this last month, and that spreadsheet has my new email.
EDIT: It'd be funny if we could get this guy banned from Blogger for posting personal information.
The chapter flows well, but I worry that we’re now three chapters in and nothing has really happened yet other than two of the three characters are going to move to the location of the other main character. In this chapter we have a third perspective to follow, after hardly getting to know the previous two. I’m still looking for a hook to a greater story line, but so far I’m not seeing it yet. This chapter, like the previous two is a setup for a POV character, but not of the greater story and that’s what I’m missing most.
[...] it’s like we’re getting the character far before their story-lines actually begin. Instead of in late, out early, we’re starting way early. They don’t really have any conflicts or problems yet either, big or small.
Sancha’s big concern is getting a mission, which she gets in the same chapter when she’s sent to Zandras.
[Beatrus is] going to marry a prince; is there a better husband imaginable?
I don’t know what Miki wants, but he’s happy where he is too.