It really should go without saying, but this post contains spoilers. If you read it before reading the submission, your reaction will be tainted by it. You have been warned.
This is a nice little take on the life of a lycanthrope, turning our assumed order of things on its head.
Things that were not clear on first reading:
- When you say "a grouse is flushed out..." the use of passive voice creates confusion. I assumed it was the wolf who had flushed the bird out, then when you went on to say "It is a cat..." I thought you were talking about the bird and I was all like, "Er, wait...isn't it a bird? Not a cat?" I finally realized what you meant, but it wasn't very clear.
- When does this poor beast sleep?
Things that were not clear on the second reading:
- What race are his children? Does he have wolf pups or man pups? Or does he have both? It's ambiguous in the story. You may have intended it that way, but I think it works better if we know. In fact, I think it would be cool if he has two families to support.
- Why do the humans trap and tranquilize him? If I were the MC, I'd be pissed. Just leave me be, right? I'm not hurting anyone...
Language issues:
- Your writing flows poorly, mostly due to a lack of commas, semicolons, and emdashes. The words themselves generally work well, but they frequently lack appropriate punctuation.
- I would normally scream and holler at the use of first person-present tense. In this context it works...sort of. Nevertheless, were I to be you, I'd rewrite it in first person-past tense and see which works better.
Stuff what don't work:
- The frequent references to "having a secret" don't quite work for me. I feel like the wolf would accept his rapid healing as ordinary, the normal state; he does not remember his secret, so why does he remember that it's a secret? It's just who and what he is, and if you present it that way I think it will do a better job conveying a sense of mystery.
- The ending is a bit abrupt.
Nice work!