I liked this chapter better than the last one – there’s still a lot of information being given through Elidor’s thoughts, but I mind this a lot less than the info-dump conversation in chapter two. Your descriptions paint a nice picture of the city and Elidor’s actions, though your prose is a bit rough in places, missing words and parts of sentences for instance.
A few examples:
The cathedral was massive and how the Church had found the resources to build such a magnificent work of architecture with howling gargoyles and carved buttresses of marble and granite.
Is missing a closing part for the ‘how’, such as: ...and marble and granite Elidor didn’t know.
Another is:
The woman he searched for
I found this one most glaring, because Elidor is about to give us something potentially insightful about his target. But then it’s not there.
Other than this there are a few other small things.
The first thing is the very start of the chapter, or rather what precedes the start of the chapter: the excerpt/quote. I’ll be blunt: huh? I’ve come to expect those little pieces in fantasy stories to somehow be a part of the world the story is set in. Does your world have a 1960s, Hong Kong, or kung-fu? Maybe it’s a style thing you’re going for, but it doesn’t really work for me.
The second are your ‘too humans’. At first I thought this was a typo until I realized the characters were referring to each other as being too human. Maybe if you wrote it like too-human it would flow better.
The third thing, at the risk of sounding hypocritical, as I’ve been having chapters with multiple viewpoints as well (I’m trying to cut down, I swear) this Daslin is your fifth viewpoint in three chapters. You’re trying to show how awesome Elidor is, but at this point another viewpoint, albeit throwaway, is a bit much.