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Reading Excuses / Re: Granite Sunrise chapter 1
« on: February 05, 2009, 07:13:22 PM »
It was my intention to make it clear that Moren told the story while the three of them were eating at the table to Larraus and Dahael but I guess one sentence without direct dialog didn't get that across so I'll fix that. Larraus is the main character although he Moren and Dahael are all three going to be view point characters. I'll try and make that more clear both on revisions and especially in future chapters.
I'm working on the break up right now, the revision will have the conclusion of the "kidnapping" happen in the beginning of chapter two.
Thanks Frog.
I'm working on the break up right now, the revision will have the conclusion of the "kidnapping" happen in the beginning of chapter two.
Thanks Frog.