Also, how does Susebron eat with no tongue? I can see why he was taught he needed to take in only small pieces of food and eat slowly--wouldn't he choke if he were cramming whole pastries into his mouth?
Remember that most of taste is actually smell; hence, when you get a cold, it becomes more difficult to taste something. Sadly, this would remove the ability to taste sugars, bitter and sweet things, but that is realy only a small portion of taste.
However, I too like the way Suri is progressing. I think her characters maturation is out of necessity with a preservation of her free spirit. I am curious how you are going to resolve the issue of them leaving, though. Doesn't Susebron require weekly breath donations to survive like other returned? He certainly would not receive these if he were to run off to Idris.
Also, I wonder if it might add to the effect of Susebron's writings if you were to include deliberate misspellings into his writings, particularly into words he has never before heard such as "flirtatous."
I do have one problem with this chapter. It seems awfully convenient that Susebron is nearly completely convinced that his benevolent preists will turn against him all of a sudden. Wasn't it in the last Suri chapter that he was all but convinced that they could never kill their God-king? Also, he said at the begining of this one that he had no desire to die and give up his breath? So, why does he think he needs to run? Are we to believe that Suri is just that charismatic or that she has such a hold on him? I feel like we are missing a particularly good point that she used to convince him that she was right? Or did I just miss when she made that point...
otherwise, I liked the chapter.