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I'm curious, does the LDS allow members to join the Oddfellows, Masons, Rosey Cruscians or Shriners?

I'm not certain of the "doctrinal" rules here, but I know that my boss, (a stake president) is a Masonic leader... some sort of poohba.  If you look into politics and Law Enforcement in Utah especially, you will find many a Morman male wearing a Masonic ring.  Also, you will find that most of the Mormon traditional ceremonies are closely related, if not exact replicas, of Masonic rites and traditions.  So, if it is not widely accepted, it is secretly among the society here.

I would read "On Combat" by Dave Grossman.  He talks about the psychology and physiology behind all types of combat spanning from the Samaurai to modern day Law Enforcement.  Fascinating read. 

That would be lovely!

Thank you

Ravenstar,

You are my first official critique here in this forum so... THANKS for letting me read your stuff.   
I'm also excited to see other women here so, I hope to read a lot of your work!

Regarding your submission:

I thought your prose was quite sound and your dialogue tight.  The flow was easy to immerse myself into, which is often a rare find in amateur writers (pre-editor).  Even in this short submission, I felt lost, as though I wasn't sure what was going on, but it seemed as though you wanted me to feel that way.  It lent the entire story a mysterious allure that made me very interested to keep going.  I felt as though your descriptions could have used just a little tweaking...   I wanted to know more about what the T'wan looked like, what sort of creatures they were, defining characteristics, etc.  Also, I wanted to get a little more description of the facial expressions/body language of Taq and Tolan as they conversed.  Again their dialog was very good, realistic, and paced so well, but something like 90% of communication is body language and I like to "see" that on tha page as well it can add such dimension to an already fabulous scene.

I was interested and impressed by the way you titled things and people.  i.e.  Infirmarian, Breach, Mentalist, Junction etc.  Really lends it that "other world" quality where you know right off, you're not here and now... very creative. 

Just a few tiny things:  First paragraph, ~ "affect" needs to be changed to "effect"  I think...
                                                                               ~Tolan stands "Swiftly" twice... although Taq does not.
                                                                               ~ and in your dialogue, I wondered if the characters say "do not" rather than "don't" on purpose?  Only because that made them seem  a little stiff and unrealistic if they did that all the time... but if that is part of your characterization, then it needs to be done consistently, I suppose.

In all, VERY interesting and nicely done!  I can't wait to read more!   

~Miranda

Hello, I'm Writerainge... My writing monaker is Miranda McTavish.  (I'm a fan of alliteration).   I write because I have so many stories that are in my head I feel like there are real people in there just screaming at me to tell their stories... (some people call that crazy, I call it inspiration)     I mostly write Paranormal fantasy/mythology with a romantic (and often times erotic) edge.  Some of my inspiration comes from writers such as J.R. Ward, Karen Marie Moning, Lara Adrian, and Charlaine Harris.  I'm 24, live in Utah, work in Law Enforcement and I enjoy what I do... but my dream is to be a Novelist... So here I be, prostrating myself before your collective genius, hoping that you can help me mold myself into what I long to become.   

Thanks!  And it was great to read about all of you as well! 
~Miranda  aka. Writerainge
DISCLAIMER:  May contain frequent and gratuitous, L, V, S... and I'm generally against drug use.   

Hello all!
I'm looking to chapter swap with someone who is interested in reading something akin to Paranormal/fiction/fantasy with a Romantic Edge...   (NO Stephanie Meyer here!)  I'm not LDS.  My books are adult fiction and I'm kinda shooting for a more female audience, but not exclusively.  Living in Utah, I've found it difficult to find a critique group...  any ideas??   

 
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