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« on: March 13, 2007, 12:33:11 AM »
Ok, the only thing that stands out to me that I didn't see mentioned is that I dislike "The Bear of Partinel", which I kept reading as "Bearer". I think it's because my brain believes it should be a two syllable title. Also, I don't see bears as as savage as Theus is painted. Lion of Partinel would sound better to me, but maybe you feel that's overdone. Savage of Partinel. Giant of Partinel. Bears are fuzzy, and don't tend to kill so indiscrimiately.
Don't like him as a woman. I like the harsh brutality of Theus juxtaposed with bubbly Yunmi, or whatever her name is.
Do they keep a census? Does Theus know how many people are in his city with the strict pop control? It would help me visualize the city better if I knew how many people were in it. Is it over-crowded at 10,000 people or over-crowded at 50,000 people?