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Brandon Sanderson / Re: Warbreaker Sample Chapters
« on: October 05, 2006, 07:45:03 PM »
I really liked Chapter 27. I liked the development of the art critique idea (maybe a cover image is suggested here?). It is interesting to have a god with power that he doesn't really believe in.
I also started to wonder if Llarimar weren't a faithful lieutenant of Lightsong in a past life, but some sort of traitor. If an inspector were hot on your trail in some kind of corruption case, and you managed to assasinate him, it would really really stink if he resurrected the next day. Maybe that would motivate you enough to make you try to become his priest and keep an eye on him. But the way Llarimar is so steeped in the doctrine suggests he was a priest already, before Lightsong died. Hmmm...
I just reskimmed the first paragraphs of Chapter 1 v. 2.0. Is Nightblood silver or black? is just the hilt silver? Obviously the blade needs to be black to fit the painting, and everyone's first impression of it, but having that first description focus on the silver throws me off.
The idea of Nightblood having some mythic historical role in the Manywar is intriguing. Obviously it would take a ton of breaths to animate a sword. It is growing more clear that this is not often done in this world. Also, none of the other reanimated objects seem to talk telepathically to their users.
-J
PS I just volunteered some more superficial edits for Part II. I am the kind of person that gets bothered by typos, so I thought I would make it easier for new readers who happen to pick up the draft. Seems to go with the open-source theme here. Enjoy.
I also started to wonder if Llarimar weren't a faithful lieutenant of Lightsong in a past life, but some sort of traitor. If an inspector were hot on your trail in some kind of corruption case, and you managed to assasinate him, it would really really stink if he resurrected the next day. Maybe that would motivate you enough to make you try to become his priest and keep an eye on him. But the way Llarimar is so steeped in the doctrine suggests he was a priest already, before Lightsong died. Hmmm...
I just reskimmed the first paragraphs of Chapter 1 v. 2.0. Is Nightblood silver or black? is just the hilt silver? Obviously the blade needs to be black to fit the painting, and everyone's first impression of it, but having that first description focus on the silver throws me off.
The idea of Nightblood having some mythic historical role in the Manywar is intriguing. Obviously it would take a ton of breaths to animate a sword. It is growing more clear that this is not often done in this world. Also, none of the other reanimated objects seem to talk telepathically to their users.
-J
PS I just volunteered some more superficial edits for Part II. I am the kind of person that gets bothered by typos, so I thought I would make it easier for new readers who happen to pick up the draft. Seems to go with the open-source theme here. Enjoy.