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The Jade Knight:
"The boy Tavi has no magic to call his own, which among the people of Alera makes him something of a cripple. He can’t call a fury of the earth or of wood, like his Uncle Bernard; the fury of water like his Aunt Isana; and neither can he use a fire, metal, or air fury like his friends. To make up for his lack of magic he has to be brave and clever: characteristics which become crucial to the events happening in the Calderon Valley where he lives."
This should be:
"The boy Tavi has no magic to call his own, which, among the people of Alera, makes him something of a cripple. He can’t call a fury of the earth or of wood like his Uncle Bernard; the fury of water like his Aunt Isana; and neither can he use a fire, metal, or air fury like his friends. To make up for his lack of magic, he has to be brave and clever—characteristics which become crucial to the events happening in the Calderon Valley where he lives."
That's just in the punctuation department. Could use some editing in general, though.
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