One thing I'm starting to notice (the paragraph where the protagonist first describes his fellow prisoner is what moved me to make the comment, but I think it applies generally as well) is that you're dropping a LOT of names here, and while they're a nice touch of verisimilitude, you often put a lot of them in very close proxmity, and especially since we don't know what all of them mean it starts to sound like gobbledegook after a while.
On page six, you write "Was he really going to dump the coals on that altar and attempt to ignite this travesty of a sacrifice that the prince had arranged? ... No! Whatever happened to him, he would not forfeit that privilege [the presence] just to save his life."
This implies that Hahniel has decided not to go through with the ritual - but moments later, with no apparent change in thought (unless the prince's order swayed him, but it seemed strange to me that it would) he goes through it anyway.
The Prince seems to completely disappear during the ritual.
The dialogue between the prince, Hahniel and the nun, after the prince has announced that he is turning them out of the city, drags a bit.
Actually throwing them out is a good move, though. I'm interested to see where this goes, though of course the outside world had better live up to the fear these guys have of it.
That's all I have this time.