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Reading Excuses / Re: August 7, 2011 - Will777r - Soul Yearning - Chapter 8
« on: August 12, 2011, 05:09:26 AM »
Please note that this is the first chapter I've read, and thus my view is skewed.
I always get an urge to shudder whenever someone makes a character with a different belief than his own, but you seem to handle it well. Still, it's something to watch out for.
The part before they start talking religion with Aetherial is a bit slow, though that is probably because I haven't read the chapters that came before.
The conversation between Charom and Albione feels real. I could see that they were brothers. Well done.
I always get an urge to shudder whenever someone makes a character with a different belief than his own, but you seem to handle it well. Still, it's something to watch out for.
The part before they start talking religion with Aetherial is a bit slow, though that is probably because I haven't read the chapters that came before.
The conversation between Charom and Albione feels real. I could see that they were brothers. Well done.