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Alloy of Law Excerpt (Updated with Ch3)
« on: June 15, 2011, 05:33:58 PM »
http://www.tor.com/stories/2011/06/the-alloy-of-law-excerpt


I'm reading now, can't wait for all 6 to come out!
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Re: Allow of Law Excerpt 1
« Reply #1 on: June 15, 2011, 06:08:23 PM »
Mmm-mm. Interesting. Gripping. Fascinating.

Good read.

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Re: Allow of Law Excerpt 1
« Reply #2 on: June 15, 2011, 06:34:12 PM »
Corrections needed:

koloss to Koloss
well tailored to well-tailored (I believe)
eyeblink to eye blink
witout to without
realy to really
firepit to fire pit
re-inforcing to reinforcing
adit to adrift (I think that's what he was going for there)
judg- ing to judging


I did giggle a little when I saw the liquid is now whiskey - at least for Wax. It was nice to see the history come into play when Tan mentioned the survivor. The foreshadowing from Sazed was there for this religion. Hopefully with 5 more excerpts planned and 5 more months to release we'll get a little taste regularly.

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Re: Allow of Law Excerpt 1
« Reply #3 on: June 15, 2011, 06:44:30 PM »
adit, eyeblink, koloss, and well tailored are correct usages, and firepit is not a dictionary word but I'm calling it good. It has a 25% usage rate on an exclusionary Google search, which for me puts it into secondary usage status rather than typo.
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Re: Allow of Law Excerpt 1
« Reply #4 on: June 15, 2011, 06:52:28 PM »
Isn't Koloss a type of "people"? Like American's are capitalized? 

When I placed the in word those were the misspellings that came up with automatically. Adit's a new one for me - thanks for pointing it out :)

Firepit always comes up as misspelled. I've been writing a friend back and forth about one I want and the bright red underline gets to me. Even when I pop it in google it' separates it.

I do see with Eyeblink some places accept it and others dont. Your judgement has always worked for me in the past! :)


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Re: Allow of Law Excerpt 1
« Reply #5 on: June 15, 2011, 07:08:52 PM »
My rule of thumb with these early book-nuggets is to avoid them.  I know there are lots of people that like to get content like this, but when I finally do get to read a book that I've already read excerpts of, I find that I get annoyed pretty easily.  So yeah.

That being said, I read the first little bit of this one, and it's pretty status quo Brandon.  The explanatory bits of the magic system were a minor annoyance for me.  Guess I don't want things explained and would just like to see them in action.  I get the whole "what-else-do-you-do-for-a-stand-alone-book-with-an-already-established-world/magic-system" bit, but still.  Will be interesting to see this one in full.
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Re: Allow of Law Excerpt 1
« Reply #6 on: June 15, 2011, 07:31:08 PM »
Don't trust Word's dictionary. It accepts "prophesize" as a correct word, for pete's sake. Check m-w.com when you're checking spelling officially. That is the industry standard dictionary.

If you Google search for firepit -"fire pit" there are almost 8 million hits and searching for -firepit "fire pit" gives 26 million hits. Actual typos are at a less than 10% ratio, usually less than 1%.

I didn't know the word adit either but Brandon originally had shaft there, which is totally wrong.

We don't capitalize human or human being, so we don't capitalize koloss or kandra or elves or dwarves.
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Re: Allow of Law Excerpt 1
« Reply #7 on: June 15, 2011, 07:59:43 PM »
I think it's a sign of good writing to toss in words people don't know or see often.

I guess I think of koloss as a type of people since they started human. I can see the point. That makes think of them more as another type of evil like Tolkien's orcs.

m-w.com accepts prophesize  :o

I'll keep that in mind if I pick anything out in the future. I care more about the content than if it's written to the highest standards of proper English.

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Re: Allow of Law Excerpt 1
« Reply #8 on: June 15, 2011, 08:29:44 PM »
only as a variant, and not as a main-entry variant either. Still, it makes me shiver.
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Re: Allow of Law Excerpt 1
« Reply #9 on: June 15, 2011, 08:32:16 PM »
I guess I think of koloss as a type of people since they started human. I can see the point. That makes think of them more as another type of evil like Tolkien's orcs.

Except they aren't anymore (If I remember correctly from the HoA Q&A). They breed true now, without a need for Heamlurgical spikes from humans.
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Re: Allow of Law Excerpt 1
« Reply #10 on: June 15, 2011, 08:49:57 PM »
This was really cool to see. I loved the tantalizing glimpses of what the world's become; especially how the events of the Mistborn trilogy have been worked into religion and folklore. I can't wait to see more of that kind of thing. This'll definitely help keep me going until the book comes out. :D
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Re: Allow of Law Excerpt 1
« Reply #11 on: June 16, 2011, 12:29:58 AM »
I agree, having the names of our heroes as the names of the new noble houses, or cities was cool.

I'm assuming Harmony is Sazed ascended.

The Devil with nails in their eyes? Inquisitor? Did Tan actually see one, or is he just crazy.

And I love the clan of klossos bringing prosperity to the area. Have they changed from their bloodthirsty ways now that Ruin is no more?
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Re: Allow of Law Excerpt 1
« Reply #12 on: June 16, 2011, 12:53:04 AM »
I'm assuming Harmony is Sazed ascended.

I think Brandon may have said this somewhere.

The Devil with nails in their eyes? Inquisitor? Did Tan actually see one, or is he just crazy.

Marsh is still alive.

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Re: Allow of Law Excerpt 1
« Reply #13 on: June 16, 2011, 01:05:52 AM »
The Devil with nails in their eyes? Inquisitor? Did Tan actually see one, or is he just crazy.

Marsh is still alive.

Considering that Ruin is no longer around to control Marsh, I wonder if Marsh has been sent mad from having ruin in his mind, and so many spikes in his body. Or maybe Marsh isn't that evil, but because of the spikes in his eyes, Tan just thought he was the Devil. Maybe in an attempt to divert our attention from the real villain...
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Re: Allow of Law Excerpt 1
« Reply #14 on: June 16, 2011, 04:27:50 PM »
I loved the excerpt!  I can't wait for the rest!