My elevator speech to Moshe...

[Chaos]

And I helped!

Though, now that I've been awake since 4am, I'm spent.

[ErikHolmes]

So I bit the bullet and just sent the query to Moshe!

I went with:

Kail thought he was just an average kid until his best friend entrusted him with a magic sword with his dying breath. After it transports him to another world of magic and legends he'll be confronted with the seemingly impossible task of overcoming faeries, unkillable body snatchers and even gods in order to keep his promise to his friend. But while there he will meet a beautiful troll that will reveal to him that he is more then mortal--a Godslayer. Alone and stranded, he will have to make a choice: save the one he loves, or save the world.

He told me he'd look at it, unless its YA! LOL. If it's YA he has to refer it to Susan Chang since she's Tor's YA editor. But he also offered to help me get in contact with her!

All in all, I'm happy with the response I got. It seems positive.

I replied to him and explained that I wrote it thinking it would be YA, but that others have told me that they don't think that it is. I gave him a little more info. We'll see if he thinks its a YA or not.

[Recovering_Cynic]

Congrats man.  The story rocks, so I hope it goes somewhere.

One minor thing you might correct if you should send the elevator speech somewhere else:

Kail thought he was just an average kid until a dying friend entrusted him with a magic sword[Omit]. After the sword transports . . .

As to whether or not it's YA, that's a tough one to call.  The story has elements of both genres, although if it's YA, it might sell better, so keep that in mind.  Your editor might want to market it that way for profit reasons.

[ErikHolmes]

As to whether or not it's YA, that's a tough one to call.  The story has elements of both genres, although if it's YA, it might sell better, so keep that in mind.  Your editor might want to market it that way for profit reasons.

LOL, _I_ want to market it that way for profit reasons!

[Recovering_Cynic]

True, true.  Of course, you could modify the beginning just a little and make it even more YA.  If your MC is about 18, then you'll easily fit the category.

[Chaos]

Always good to get editors to look at it. Though even if they like it, you know you sort of need to finish the book.

[Frog]

Congrats. Though Chaos is right. Hmmm... I don't think I would want editors anywhere near my MS until I was finished. I have a hard enough time staying motivated after letting you guys go at it.

[Chaos]

Heck, I'm not letting you guys see what really cool work is happening in Rebirth until the end of the summer.