It was very nice. Okay it fell fairly close to awesome.
I say fairly close because, despite all the great stuff (the writing, the prose, the dialogue, the game of guess who the real bad guy is) every time some piece of modernity came up, everything else crumbled. Through out the piece there are small examples such as "messed up," early on and others. There are quite a few others, actually and I could point them all out but I'm certain you'll catch them/get rid of them in the eventual rewrite anyway. One you might not notice though, is the use of the word Centimeter. That word does not strike me as conjoined with the rest of the setting. That's probably just me though.
I was really really really really glad Rosalin was not a chick in a dude's body, but mellang of the giant and herself (making her new body a chick body). I can't stand gender switching stories. Well that's not entirely true, but in general its such a cheap comedic gag.
Rosalin does not sound like she did before. Perhaps that's intentional, perhaps not. She seems older. How you view that is up to you. I did not have an issue with it (beyond noticing the voice change).
Still not a fan of the elemental magics but I'm letting it slide . . . this time . . . because everything else was neat and you used the word shaman (which always scores points).
Also at the end of the Rosalin part before you mustered off after the Sister, the men surrounded her. The cut was good. No need to go on. I'm still surprised, however, that she did not suddenly become aware of their weapons. I think, personally, that would make it seem just that more ominous.
