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Re: Jade Knight's thread of Proofreadingishnesses
« Reply #60 on: November 28, 2005, 04:51:36 PM »
Well, when you double-hyphen like that, it involves me going through and editing each individually, but I actually typed in the em-dash via ANSI code.  I'll try to remember to actually use an HTML code, but that's so "blech".  =รพ
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Re: Jade Knight's thread of Proofreadingishnesses
« Reply #61 on: November 29, 2005, 12:51:54 PM »
"It's because we're tired from to much festivity-ing and writing bad fiction (the My Little Pony/Watchmen furry slash-fiction didn't generate anywhere near 50,000 words like I thought it would -- though I understand Fellfrosch managed to write something respectable having to do with women's underwear). "

Can someone edit this (to > too, -- > em dash)
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Re: Jade Knight's thread of Proofreadingishnesses
« Reply #62 on: December 02, 2005, 07:38:13 PM »
FYI:  I'm taking some time off from proofreading; I have some homework I desperately need to try to catch up on.

I'll be back in a week or two.  I hope you'll manage without me for the time being.
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Re: Jade Knight's thread of Proofreadingishnesses
« Reply #63 on: December 30, 2005, 10:50:43 PM »
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Re: Jade Knight's thread of Proofreadingishnesses
« Reply #64 on: February 06, 2006, 02:37:30 PM »
Okay, I'm going to finally try to stop slacking off.  Here's an edit:

"By the time you hear the werewolf organ enhanced, crazed serial killer, it's probably already too late."

Something needs a hyphen, I think, either "werewolf-organ" or "organ-enhanced".

"Woody Allen leaves New York, and his usual frenetic style, to make his best movie in years."

I think "and" should be "in".
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Re: Jade Knight's thread of Proofreadingishnesses
« Reply #65 on: February 06, 2006, 02:40:41 PM »
werewolf-organ

cause they are cut out from the werewolf and implanted in a serial killer.
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Re: Jade Knight's thread of Proofreadingishnesses
« Reply #66 on: February 06, 2006, 02:45:57 PM »
I think it's supposed to be and, as in he's leaving both New York AND his usual style.

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Re: Jade Knight's thread of Proofreadingishnesses
« Reply #67 on: February 06, 2006, 03:07:00 PM »
Oh.  Then the first comma needs to die.  "He's leaving New York and his usual frenetic style"
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Re: Jade Knight's thread of Proofreadingishnesses
« Reply #68 on: February 06, 2006, 03:16:47 PM »
The commas are being used to make a nonrestrictive clause, so the question is, "Is this phrase restrictive or non-restrictive?" Either you keep both or delete both, but not just one.
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Re: Jade Knight's thread of Proofreadingishnesses
« Reply #69 on: February 06, 2006, 03:26:20 PM »
"Seriously, all I heard was 'blah blah blah blah blah.'"

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Re: Jade Knight's thread of Proofreadingishnesses
« Reply #70 on: February 06, 2006, 03:32:25 PM »
Well, this is a thread for proofreading, isn't it? Sorry if it bores you. I was just trying to contribute to the discussion.
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Re: Jade Knight's thread of Proofreadingishnesses
« Reply #71 on: February 06, 2006, 03:37:32 PM »
She has a point.  You really shouldn't have either comma.
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Re: Jade Knight's thread of Proofreadingishnesses
« Reply #72 on: February 06, 2006, 04:19:27 PM »
I'm saying, in my eloquent manner, that I didn't understnad what she was saying.

and I didn't write the copy for that one. Skar did.

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Re: Jade Knight's thread of Proofreadingishnesses
« Reply #73 on: February 06, 2006, 04:43:39 PM »
Well, if you care, I can explain.

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Re: Jade Knight's thread of Proofreadingishnesses
« Reply #74 on: February 06, 2006, 04:55:41 PM »
nah, I'm just going to put it on restriction.