Author Topic: Jade Knight's thread of Proofreadingishnesses  (Read 19890 times)

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Re: Jade Knight's thread of Proofreadingishnesses
« Reply #105 on: February 23, 2007, 10:44:46 PM »
wow, neither of you realise you just have to go and edit to actuall poll post in the Suggestions Box board to do this?  Both of you should have rights to do it.
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Re: Jade Knight's thread of Proofreadingishnesses
« Reply #106 on: February 23, 2007, 10:57:18 PM »
This just goes to show how little some of us know about what we can with our admin rights. You're so used to it, Sprig, and you know all the back-end stuff so well, it's obvious to you. Sorry to be a bother.
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Re: Jade Knight's thread of Proofreadingishnesses
« Reply #107 on: February 23, 2007, 10:59:37 PM »
Just figured it was obvious since you create polls via the forum and we've had many discussions on the forum about how the polls work in conjunction with the front page.

Plus would it have killed either of you two to ask how to do something instead of assuming I'd fix it?  I'd rather teach you to fish then give you one.
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Re: Jade Knight's thread of Proofreadingishnesses
« Reply #108 on: February 24, 2007, 01:25:42 AM »
I currently can't do front page stuff; I assumed it was part of that (any clues yet?)  Anyway, now I know.
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Re: Jade Knight's thread of Proofreadingishnesses
« Reply #109 on: February 26, 2007, 11:54:04 PM »
"Little girls grow up wishing they really are princesses"

I think this should be "really were princesses".  I don't think we've lost the subjunctive entirely in English yet, have we?
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Re: Jade Knight's thread of Proofreadingishnesses
« Reply #110 on: March 01, 2007, 12:57:51 AM »
"When a book promises 'secrets' and 'adventure' it had better live up to the hype. "

Should there be a comma after 'adventure'?
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Re: Jade Knight's thread of Proofreadingishnesses
« Reply #111 on: March 01, 2007, 02:56:29 AM »
"When a book promises 'secrets' and 'adventure' it had better live up to the hype. "

Should there be a comma after 'adventure'?

I think a comma there is a matter of preference more than a real hard and fast rule. I didn't feel like a pause was necessary there so I didn't put one.

However.

The sentence in the review that gives me trouble is (not sure what to do with it):

A surprise filler are some of the interesting minor artifacts that have slipped from the cold, dead fingers of the long-lost titan-giants that used to rule the continent like the ‘Staff of the Magma Falls’.

What's The Almighty Jade's thoughs on that one?
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Re: Jade Knight's thread of Proofreadingishnesses
« Reply #112 on: March 01, 2007, 04:35:51 AM »
Firsly, "a surprise filler" shouldn't use "are" as a verb.

Perhaps "Some of the more surprising filler include the interesting minor artifacts that have slipped from the cold, dead fingers of the long-lost titan-giants that used to rule the continent, such as the ‘Staff of the Magma Falls’."

What do you think?  Better?  Retains the original sense?  Am I totally off?

(And shouldn't "Drow" be capitalized?  Or no?)
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Re: Jade Knight's thread of Proofreadingishnesses
« Reply #113 on: March 08, 2007, 09:02:17 AM »
"When pursuing the Green Lion, don't forget to bring a set of loaded dice, they may just save the day."

2nd comma should be a semicolon.
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Re: Jade Knight's thread of Proofreadingishnesses
« Reply #114 on: April 11, 2007, 06:25:15 PM »
Gah!!! Can someone fix the frontpage intro to the Nerdery column so the noun and verb agree??

Instead of: "Does the couples that games together stay together?"

Please choose:
"Does the couple that games together stay together?"
or
"Do the couples that game together stay together?"

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Re: Jade Knight's thread of Proofreadingishnesses
« Reply #115 on: October 30, 2008, 12:15:16 AM »
"The boy Tavi has no magic to call his own, which among the people of Alera makes him something of a cripple. He cant call a fury of the earth or of wood, like his Uncle Bernard; the fury of water like his Aunt Isana; and neither can he use a fire, metal, or air fury like his friends. To make up for his lack of magic he has to be brave and clever: characteristics which become crucial to the events happening in the Calderon Valley where he lives."

This should be:

"The boy Tavi has no magic to call his own, which, among the people of Alera, makes him something of a cripple. He cant call a fury of the earth or of wood like his Uncle Bernard; the fury of water like his Aunt Isana; and neither can he use a fire, metal, or air fury like his friends. To make up for his lack of magic, he has to be brave and clevercharacteristics which become crucial to the events happening in the Calderon Valley where he lives."

That's just in the punctuation department.  Could use some editing in general, though.
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