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Krag the Unbeliever, ch 1

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The Holy Saint, Grand High Poobah, Master of Monkeys, Ehlers:
What specifically do you want us to pay attention to in this chapter, Fell?

Fellfrosch:
In this chapter, I mostly want to know what you think of it overall. I'll ask some questions once you've read it, but for now I don't want to taint anyone's opinion.

The Holy Saint, Grand High Poobah, Master of Monkeys, Ehlers:
It's hard not to make the comparison between Krag and Sir Carl, though Krag is ultimately much less oblivious, except about his level of talent, and even that he's still less oblivious than Carl. Anyway, I'm just throwing htat out as an initial impression. That and the people worshipping a berry god seem like pansies, though at least they could be enraged enough to start a fight. Finally, I could visualize the scene very well, which is important. It's funny without being silly or ridiculous, which I think is a good point. Looking forward to chapter 2

Entsuropi:
Comments:

Krag, he speaks like you. Uses phrases you use.
Very funny. Reminded me slightly of the Discworld.
The innkeeper getting angry - i assume this is due to some unmentioned reason?
Clan of the dead bear - great name, wonderful reasoning behind it.

Great stuff. Wanna read more! More, damnit, more! Oh wait, i already have the rest...

Fellfrosch:
That's the biggest weakness in +m36y
writin
g3.6: my characters all sound like me3.6 5922.3H2opefully I can fix that in a rewrite.

(my 8-mlnthold boy helped me write this post, by teh way.)

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