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Reading Excuses / 04 May 2009 - Renoard - EL SHADDU - forematter and ch1 & 2 v2
« on: May 04, 2009, 02:18:23 AM »
This submission is rated VLDS For mild language, consumption of alcohol and a
simulated sexual assault.
Summary
This is speculative fiction which will likely fit into the fantasy genre'.
It sets the stage for the reader to believe they are reading an ancient
chronicle and that the heroes and villains of the story might have lived some
3500 years ago, in a world very much like our own. The unnamed *hero* is
lured out of hiding.
Please be patient with the length and the nontraditional forematter. It's needed to make this submission make sense.
After reviewing I notice that a global search managed to remove ending punctuation on many sentences in this submission. Ryan, I'd be happy with any edits you feel you have time to suggest, but don't overload yourself. Also I realized that a whole paragraph got pretty mangled in this version. Below is the current paragraph. My only excuse is that my document template got corrupted and the repair has left a lot of errors in the text. I found one spot where "inhuman" had gotten transformed into "in Human".
She'd been a deeply religious woman and quoted copiously from the Sefer Khayim. They'd been privileged to own a copy. The Sefer or Hassefer, as it was referred to by most believers, was the written text of the prophecies and teachings of the religion. Scrolls were far too expensive for an individual family to own, and the sacred texts were even more so, because of the extreme care required to copy them. Many scribes lost their lives while drafting copies, due to a typo or inattention and a lack of proper attitude while working. Use of the names of God had to be done prayerfully and carefully so as not to inadvertently summon the spirit associated with that name. This principle had lead to the practice of calling reckless foolishness sophistry, in memory of those careless soferim who had summoned the presence of El Shaddai, the destroyer of worlds. Those who heard the voice of El Shaddai seldom lived to hear anything else again.
simulated sexual assault.
Summary
This is speculative fiction which will likely fit into the fantasy genre'.
It sets the stage for the reader to believe they are reading an ancient
chronicle and that the heroes and villains of the story might have lived some
3500 years ago, in a world very much like our own. The unnamed *hero* is
lured out of hiding.
Please be patient with the length and the nontraditional forematter. It's needed to make this submission make sense.
After reviewing I notice that a global search managed to remove ending punctuation on many sentences in this submission. Ryan, I'd be happy with any edits you feel you have time to suggest, but don't overload yourself. Also I realized that a whole paragraph got pretty mangled in this version. Below is the current paragraph. My only excuse is that my document template got corrupted and the repair has left a lot of errors in the text. I found one spot where "inhuman" had gotten transformed into "in Human".
She'd been a deeply religious woman and quoted copiously from the Sefer Khayim. They'd been privileged to own a copy. The Sefer or Hassefer, as it was referred to by most believers, was the written text of the prophecies and teachings of the religion. Scrolls were far too expensive for an individual family to own, and the sacred texts were even more so, because of the extreme care required to copy them. Many scribes lost their lives while drafting copies, due to a typo or inattention and a lack of proper attitude while working. Use of the names of God had to be done prayerfully and carefully so as not to inadvertently summon the spirit associated with that name. This principle had lead to the practice of calling reckless foolishness sophistry, in memory of those careless soferim who had summoned the presence of El Shaddai, the destroyer of worlds. Those who heard the voice of El Shaddai seldom lived to hear anything else again.
