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Reading Excuses / Re: 15-12-08 - Cold Feet
« on: December 15, 2008, 12:08:31 PM »
"It took all the courage in my body" - reads a bit as if the narrator were somehow seperated from their body.
I had the same vague impression that the narrator was female, but I can't really say why.
Near the end the thoughts seemed a bit too sombre and gloomy. I would have expected a touch of self-mockery when the comparison of the narrator to the cigarette stub came up. As is, it's a bit over the top.
I too think that it's well written, but a tad too short to say for sure whether I'd be interested in the story or not. But I'd be willing to read on to find out.
I had the same vague impression that the narrator was female, but I can't really say why.
Near the end the thoughts seemed a bit too sombre and gloomy. I would have expected a touch of self-mockery when the comparison of the narrator to the cigarette stub came up. As is, it's a bit over the top.
I too think that it's well written, but a tad too short to say for sure whether I'd be interested in the story or not. But I'd be willing to read on to find out.