Show Posts

This section allows you to view all posts made by this member. Note that you can only see posts made in areas you currently have access to.


Topics - Flo_the_G

Pages: [1]
1
Reading Excuses / Oct. 19 - Concord - Ch. 14+15
« on: October 19, 2009, 11:26:46 AM »
Following the last few critiques I received, I went back to the drawing board, refurbished my outline, and ended up cutting the Spencer character completely. He'll still make a few appearances, especially later on, but he won't be a main POV-character anymore.  Which is, incidentally, why cahpter 13 is missing. That was told from Spencer's POV and drove home the point you folks made while I wrote it, namely that Spencer sounds far too much like von Bredow.

I also tried my hand at lengthening the chapters, as advised.

So, uh, please find all the other flaws I've cunningly hidden in my latest submission. ;D

2
Reading Excuses / Sept. 21 - Concord
« on: September 21, 2009, 10:17:44 AM »
My pseudo-chapters are growing shorter and shorter. I wonder if I should be concerned. You tell me. :D

Oh and thanks for reading and all that.

3
Reading Excuses / 31 August - Concord - Chs 7-9
« on: August 31, 2009, 06:26:27 PM »
I'll combine these numbered sections I've been calling "chapters" into proper chapters somewhere along the line, and I think these three would fit together quite nicely. Anyway, do your worst, I know you want to.

4
Reading Excuses / 3 August - Concord - Chs 5 and 6
« on: August 03, 2009, 11:37:23 AM »
As always, thanks for reading, commenting, etc. :D

5
Reading Excuses / 20 July - Concord - Chs 3 and 4
« on: July 20, 2009, 10:59:30 AM »
Now that everyone's forgotten about the prologue... tell me what you think. ;D

And, of course, thanks for reading!

6
Reading Excuses / 22 June - Concord - Prologue, Ch. 1 and Ch. 2
« on: June 22, 2009, 10:53:29 AM »
I hope you all got the email, thanks for reading and, uh, be as harsh as necessary.

Pages: [1]